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During one your regular walks through the streets of @@CAPITAL@@, you noticed that the number of panhandlers has sharply risen. Many annoyed passerby see you, and are asking you to do something about it.

[validity] Must have high income inequality, low welfare

[option 1]
A woman storms up to you, furious. “These panhandlers are filthy, horrible people! I just want to go about my day undisturbed, and these people are here on every street corner, begging me for my hard-earned cash. You must make panhandling illegal! Besides, I’ve heard most of these people aren’t really on the streets.
[fallout 1]people are arrested for asking if they can borrow a @@CURRENCY@@

[option 2]
A scraggly old man wearing a torn jacket saunters over to you. “It’s not like I enjoy begging for money; it’s quite embarrassing actually. If I only were to have a place to sleep and food to eat, I wouldn’t have to do this. Please, for us on the streets, pour some more funding into welfare. Those better off than I could use some more taxing anyway.”
[fallout 2]many frugal @@DENONYMPLURAL@@ abuse the nation’s new soup kitchens

[option 3]
A young man wearing green tights dashes over to you, followed by other similarly-dressed men. “My name is Robert Hood, and I think I have a solution to your problem. You see, me and my band of merry men can take some luxuries from the 1%, and give them to those who need it more! Of course, we’ll need to take a small amount of the goods for ourselves as payment.”
[fallout 3]many @@DENONYMPLURAL@@ have been found with stolen art from the @@CAPITAL@@ Museum.
Please give me any feedback you have. Thanks!

We might have something similar...

I’m wondering if the “regular walk” thing is a player autonomy sin

Might be worth addressing something about "professional beggars" who deliberately pretend to be poor (by wearing raggy clothing and such) when they're in fact making a pretty good profit.

I’ll try to add that in when I update the draft.

In terms of something similar, I drafted on this topic a while ago:

viewtopic.php?f=13&t=372080

However, its one of my least favourite drafts so I'm unlikely to self-publish it. Help yourself to anything you want from it.

Candlewhisper Archive wrote:In terms of something similar, I drafted on this topic a while ago:

viewtopic.php?f=13&t=372080

However, its one of my least favourite drafts so I'm unlikely to self-publish it. Help yourself to anything you want from it.

Thanks!

*bump*

I’d really like to get another bit of feedback or 2 before I make the next draft.

*bump*

Spice up fallout 3

Fauxia wrote:Spice up fallout 3

Updated.

#251 is a similar topic. Keep that in mind and make sure your issue is distinct from it.

The 19th Century wrote:#251 is a similar topic. Keep that in mind and make sure your issue is distinct from it.

Agreed. Several things about begging people on the streets have been introduced as well lately. Try and find the most interesting and distinct thing possible.

The 19th Century wrote:#251 is a similar topic. Keep that in mind and make sure your issue is distinct from it.

Thanks for the number. I’ll look it over and make some changes so this draft is different from it.

Hello, not a bad little issue you got here. Now let's take a look:

Isn't option 3 a little too on-the-nose?

Australian rePublic wrote:Hello, not a bad little issue you got here. Now let's take a look:

Isn't option 3 a little too on-the-nose?

What do you mean?

I don't mind option 3. It's obviously a silly option, but you're not having a problem with the issue being too long, so there's room for a silly option.

*bump*

"Are asking you to do something about it" is very bland. Make it more funny, or else just cut it out.

Fauxia wrote:"Are asking you to do something about it" is very bland. Make it more funny, or else just cut it out.

What if I put “are begging you to do something about it” as a pun?

*sighs*

/bump

This one will be next on my list of things to tackle after I do Dolor Mortis's.

Well, uh, actually, the only thing I have to say is this:
The first word in an effect line should not be capitalized. It automatically is if you answer issues, but it isn't on a nation's homepage or activity feed.

I actually have no other qualms with this draft! It's simplistic, yes, but it really feels like it has an old-issue charm that I can't help but enjoy.

Some people might want a few things punched up, but I like it as-is.

Jutsa wrote:Well, uh, actually, the only thing I have to say is this:
The first word in an effect line should not be capitalized. It automatically is if you answer issues, but it isn't on a nation's homepage or activity feed.

I actually have no other qualms with this draft! It's simplistic, yes, but it really feels like it has an old-issue charm that I can't help but enjoy.

Some people might want a few things punched up, but I like it as-is.

Wow, thanks! That means a lot coming from someone who has seen so many different issues.

Added low welfare into the validity.

Wow, thanks! That means a lot coming from someone who has seen so many different issues.

Eheh, thanks, but don't get your hopes too high yet. Never know when someone might have an opposing opinion.