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[Noahs Second Country]

[desc]After inadvertently watching the season 2 premiere of "Z-Day Preppers,", and then following your annual meeting with your Minister of Emergency Handling, you've realized that disaster could strike at any moment. A few people have met with you to help prepare for the impending apocalypse, if there ever is one. However, you have no idea what to prepare for, if anything.
[validity]Low safety, lower taxation, more freedoms.
[option]"Z-Day will come, mark my words," claims horror writer Jax Rooks, author of a popular zombie book series. "Hundreds of people die every day. Millions die every year. When Z-Day comes, we need to be prepared for billions of zombies everywhere in @@REGION@@. Who knows what will happen. Luckily, you can buy my books and figure out how to survive any zombie attack, for example, you can purchase, 20 Ways to Kill an Undead Human Being for only 29.99, plus shipping and handling. You can also purchase my patented zombie apocalypse survival tools. Maybe you could also go and advertise my book too...?"
[effect]this nonexistent effect line is really weak and I'll change it later.
[option]"Now lets be realistic here," claims theorist @@RANDOMNAME@@. "There is no way to survive the apocalypse. There are only 3 likely situations; the universe compresses, and universe over expands, or we get hit by an asteroid. To be honest, we should just stop preparing for the end of the world, because there is no way to sustain our race."
[effect]...
[option]"Actually, it is quite the opposite." says @@RANDOMNAME@@. "There is a volcano in Greenstone Park in Maxtopia. According to some research conducted by my team, this volcano could potentially annihilate all of @@REGION@@ in one go! Worst of all, we don't know when this is going to happen, but when it does, expect extreme climate change and earthquakes everywhere. That's what you need to prepare for."
[effect]
[option]"You are overlooking things here," inserts tree hugger @@RANDOMNAME@@, who has just ridden in via bicycle. "Global warming is the real problem. The only way to reverse it is to endorse clean energy, electric cars, and reduced emissions. By using sustainable, natural resources, we can prevent global warning completely."
[effect]
[option-validity]Must not have banned AI]
[option]"The only thing that will kill all of us is what we've made— artificial intelligence." states Luddite @@RANDOMNAME@@. I keep

[option]"This is what happens when you export more than you import," claims @@RANDOMNAME@@, the Director of the Emergency Preparedness Agency. "This agency has been underfunded and ignored. Now it is time for you to make up for it. We need to half the amount of necessities that we export, and double what we import. Then, we need to claim as many of these materials as we possibly can. Only then will @@NAME@@ be ready for the apocalypse. By the way, thanks for finding my golf clubs."
[effect]the economy looks like it has been hit by the apocalypse, to prepare for it.

[option]"Kill the economy to save the people... makes sense," says @@RANDOMNAME@@, founder of ZombieKiller Inc.. My company manufactures and installs professional apocalypse weapons and parts for whomever pays for it. For the past 21 years, we have been working towards a more prepared and aware population. However, we remain small and are lacking in profit. With enough money, we could provide cheaper and better shelters, as well as state of the art food storage and weapons systems. With citizens armed with WaterGuns™ and our newest product, BrainFood™, citizens will be ready for when the zombies come. Just sign this bill— the cost is definitely worth it."
[effect]food and water are being conserved to shoot at zombies when the apocalypse strikes.

[option]"Zombies? Are you serious?" questions scientist @@RANDOMNAME@@, while nervously and repeatedly checking a complex and confusing instrument. "We should be worried more about more reasonable apocalyptic situations, like the Greenstone Caldera in Bigtopia! Dormant for 420 years... and then it explodes and sends @@REGION@@ into an Ice Age! We need to monitor these kinds of things, so we can all flee when the time comes!"
[effect]the government monitors problems but doesn't do anything about them.

[option]"Have you heard of natural selection?" asks well known anarchist and flag burner @@RANDOMNAME@@. "This nation is supposed to be great, but there are so many people who live on welfare. This is just like extended welfare for the poor people. Tell the rich to prepare themselves for the apocalypse, and tell the poor that they can go and—" a small grenade in your closet explodes and you are forced to evacuate the scene.
[effect]the wealthy are rarely seen, as they live in zombie - proof shelters

Edit: Added options
Added option 3.

[Australian rePublic]

RE Description: SO you want to create a national emergency supply, dispite the fact that one already exists?

[Drayxaso]

RE Description: SO you want to create a national emergency supply, dispite the fact that one already exists?

One exists, its just hopelessly lacking in supplies.

[Noahs Second Country]

RE Description: SO you want to create a national emergency supply, dispite the fact that one already exists?

Despite

[Noahs Second Country]

Done with the options and effects.

[Frieden-und Freudenland]

I really like this idea!

How about some crazy citizen who is really obsessed with preparing for the apocalypse and who takes this idea VERY seriously, like some people we see on Doomsday Preppers. I'd suggest you add such a person to your issue, his/her proposal could be the 4th option.

This person, for instance, could ask you to invest a lot of money for buying emergency supplies for a disaster scenario which will probably NEVER happen in real life.

So how about a Nervous Nelly who is afraid that a volcano in Bigtopia that has been dormant for 2,000 years may become active again and spurt out lava, then this huge mass of lava can flow into the sea, thereby creating a chain of big waves, which, by the time they reach the coastline of @@NATION@@ turn into a tsunami and destroy every person and thing that stands in their way... and then s/he suggests that every house should build a waterproof shelter or that you buy an inflatable rescue boat for every citizen, or something like that.

Truth is, such people do exist - so why shouldn't one exist in your issue?

[Drayxaso]

Honestly, this seems like the perfect place to throw in a reference to the yearly NS zombie invasion. You could have someone present it as an example of how important an emergency supply would be, reference it in the description as a reason why the supply is depleted, or even have someone say something like a zombie invasion is impossible as a joke.

[Noahs Second Country]

Honestly, this seems like the perfect place to throw in a reference to the yearly NS zombie invasion. You could have someone present it as an example of how important an emergency supply would be, reference it in the description as a reason why the supply is depleted, or even have someone say something like a zombie invasion is impossible as a joke.

I really like this idea!

How about some crazy citizen who is really obsessed with preparing for the apocalypse and who takes this idea VERY seriously, like some people we see on Doomsday Preppers. I'd suggest you add such a person to your issue, his/her proposal could be the 4th option.

This person, for instance, could ask you to invest a lot of money for buying emergency supplies for a disaster scenario which will probably NEVER happen in real life.

So how about a Nervous Nelly who is afraid that a volcano in Bigtopia that has been dormant for 2,000 years may become active again and spurt out lava, then this huge mass of lava can flow into the sea, thereby creating a chain of big waves, which, by the time they reach the coastline of @@NATION@@ turn into a tsunami and destroy every person and thing that stands in their way... and then s/he suggests that every house should build a waterproof shelter or that you buy an inflatable rescue boat for every citizen, or something like that.

Truth is, such people do exist - so why shouldn't one exist in your issue?

Alright. I'll change stuff later.

[Noahs Second Country]

So how about a Nervous Nelly who is afraid that a volcano in Bigtopia that has been dormant for 2,000 years may become active again and spurt out lava, then this huge mass of lava can flow into the sea, thereby creating a chain of big waves, which, by the time they reach the coastline of @@NATION@@ turn into a tsunami and destroy every person and thing that stands in their way... and then s/he suggests that every house should build a waterproof shelter or that you buy an inflatable rescue boat for every citizen, or something like that.

Changed the idea a little, but thanks. Added it as option 3.

[Helaw]

The effect lines lack a little pizzazz. Some advice that I'll give for them is that they should avoid telling the reader upfront what has happened; instead, they should explore the outcome in a humorous and occasionally downright ridiculous way. Regardless, they should always be as funny as possible.

[Noahs Second Country]

The effect lines lack a little pizzazz. Some advice that I'll give for them is that they should avoid telling the reader upfront what has happened; instead, they should explore the outcome in a humorous and occasionally downright ridiculous way. Regardless, they should always be as funny as possible.

I did them in about 20 seconds... so yeah. When I have time I will fix them.

[Noahs Second Country]

Changed the effect lines, but can't think of much right now. I would like some title suggestions.

Planning to submit this one soon, I like how it has come out so far.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

as well as the knowledge that disaster could strike at any moment,

This line is too assumptive.

you have spontaneously went and called a few "experts" to address the issue.

This line overrides player autonomy.

[option]"This is what happens when you export more than you import," claims @@RANDOMNAME@@, the Director of the Emergency Preparedness Agency. "This agency has been underfunded and ignored. Now it is time for you to make up for it. We need to half the amount of necessities that we export, and double what we import. Then, we need to claim as many of these materials as we possibly can. Only then will @@NAME@@ be ready for the apocalypse. By the way, thanks for finding my golf clubs."
[effect]the economy looks like it has been hit by the apocalypse, to prepare for it.

This makes absolutely no sense. What does the balance of trade have to do with the size of your private apocalypse stockpile?

[option]"Kill the economy to save the people... makes sense," says @@RANDOMNAME@@, founder of ZombieKiller Inc.. My company manufactures and installs professional apocalypse weapons and parts for whomever pays for it. For the past 21 years, we have been working towards a more prepared and aware population. However, we remain small and are lacking in profit. With enough money, we could provide cheaper and better shelters, as well as state of the art food storage and weapons systems. With citizens armed with WaterGuns™ and our newest product, BrainFood™, citizens will be ready for when the zombies come. Just sign this bill— the cost is definitely worth it."
[effect]food and water are being conserved to shoot at zombies when the apocalypse strikes.

Too waffly, for an option that essentially comes down to "fill a bunker with guns".

[option]"Zombies? Are you serious?" questions scientist @@RANDOMNAME@@, while nervously and repeatedly checking a complex and confusing instrument. "We should be worried more about more reasonable apocalyptic situations, like the Greenstone Caldera in Bigtopia! Dormant for 420 years... and then it explodes and sends @@REGION@@ into an Ice Age! We need to monitor these kinds of things, so we can all flee when the time comes!"
[effect]the government monitors problems but doesn't do anything about them.

The effect line says it all - you're not addressing the presented issue.

[option]"Have you heard of natural selection?" asks well known anarchist and flag burner @@RANDOMNAME@@. "This nation is supposed to be great, but there are so many people who live on welfare. This is just like extended welfare for the poor people. Tell the rich to prepare themselves for the apocalypse, and tell the poor that they can go and—" a small grenade in your closet explodes and you are forced to evacuate the scene.
[effect]the wealthy are rarely seen, as they live in zombie - proof shelters

What do the shelters of the rich and poor people have to do with it? The presented issue was that LEADER's bunker is understocked.

Right now this issue is all over the place, and would be an easy reject for any editor. I suggest wind back to the core premise, tighten that up, then have options that actually address the premise.

[Australian rePublic]

What scale are we discussing here?
A local disaster such as an earthquake or a fire, or a national disaster such as a medical emergency or a war? If the former, the emergency supply plan would include shipping in supplies from the rest of the nation, or if your problem is the latter (and/or, you're the size of Singapore), that plan would leave you up the creak without a paddle...

[Noahs Second Country]

as well as the knowledge that disaster could strike at any moment,

This line is too assumptive.

you have spontaneously went and called a few "experts" to address the issue.

This line overrides player autonomy.

Perhaps validity for nations with bad weather? I'm not sure if I understand your second statement.

[option]"This is what happens when you export more than you import," claims @@RANDOMNAME@@, the Director of the Emergency Preparedness Agency. "This agency has been underfunded and ignored. Now it is time for you to make up for it. We need to half the amount of necessities that we export, and double what we import. Then, we need to claim as many of these materials as we possibly can. Only then will @@NAME@@ be ready for the apocalypse. By the way, thanks for finding my golf clubs."
[effect]the economy looks like it has been hit by the apocalypse, to prepare for it.

This makes absolutely no sense. What does the balance of trade have to do with the size of your private apocalypse stockpile?

Admittedly, this option is not well written. I tried to set it up as a "hoard everything option," and failed miserably.

[option]"Kill the economy to save the people... makes sense," says @@RANDOMNAME@@, founder of ZombieKiller Inc.. My company manufactures and installs professional apocalypse weapons and parts for whomever pays for it. For the past 2 years, we have been working towards a more prepared and aware population. However, we remain small and are lacking in profit. With enough money, we could provide cheaper and better shelters, as well as state of the art food storage and weapons systems. With citizens armed with WaterGuns™ and our newest product, BrainFood™, citizens will be ready for when the zombies come. Just sign this bill— the cost is definitely worth it."
[effect]food and water are being conserved to shoot at zombies when the apocalypse strikes.

I tried to set this up as a "Shark Tank" situation, where a small company pitches their product to Leader.

[option]"Zombies? Are you serious?" questions scientist @@RANDOMNAME@@, while nervously and repeatedly checking a complex and confusing instrument. "We should be worried more about more reasonable apocalyptic situations, like the Greenstone Caldera in Bigtopia! Dormant for 420 years... and then it explodes and sends @@REGION@@ into an Ice Age! We need to monitor these kinds of things, so we can all flee when the time comes!"
[effect]the government monitors problems but doesn't do anything about them.

I'll change this to a "be prepared for an actual problem, not zombies" option.

[option]"Have you heard of natural selection?" asks well known anarchist and flag burner @@RANDOMNAME@@. "This nation is supposed to be great, but there are so many people who live on welfare. This is just like extended welfare for the poor people. Tell the rich to prepare themselves for the apocalypse, and tell the poor that they can go and—" a small grenade in your closet explodes and you are forced to evacuate the scene.
[effect]the wealthy are rarely seen, as they live in zombie - proof shelters

What do the shelters of the rich and poor people have to do with it? The presented issue was that LEADER's bunker is understocked.

Right now this issue is all over the place, and would be an easy reject for any editor. I suggest wind back to the core premise, tighten that up, then have options that actually address the premise.

I set this issue up as the @@NAME@@ supply (concerning necessities such as water and food), not one of Leader's... bad idea?

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Well, you've gone and made me write another Workshop factbook.

What is player autonomy?

https://www.nationstates.net/nation=can ... /id=775709

[Noahs Second Country]

Well, you've gone and made me write another Workshop factbook.

What is player autonomy?

https://www.nationstates.net/nation=can ... /id=775709

Ah, thank you.

[Luna Amore]

as well as the knowledge that disaster could strike at any moment,

This line is too assumptive.

you have spontaneously went and called a few "experts" to address the issue.

This line overrides player autonomy.

Not taking a side, but that sort of phrasing exists in the issue base as recently as #638. Not sure how wide-spread it is.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Opinions vary. Editors edit differently. Even individual editors edit differently at different times.

Expect some time in 2018 a CWA big review of player autonomy, slicing through the existing issues and attempting to take out all the lines like the one in 638. We can fight it out at that time.

[Luna Amore]

Opinions vary. Editors edit differently. Even individual editors edit differently at different times.

Expect some time in 2018 a CWA big review of player autonomy, slicing through the existing issues and attempting to take out all the lines like the one in 638. We can fight it out at that time.

Is it weird that my first thought was 'oh god, I've uncovered another CWA project!"

[Noahs Second Country]

Opinions vary. Editors edit differently. Even individual editors edit differently at different times.

Expect some time in 2018 a CWA big review of player autonomy, slicing through the existing issues and attempting to take out all the lines like the one in 638. We can fight it out at that time.

I will remove the phrase whenever I get to changing this. Things are getting busy again in RL.

[Trotterdam]

I'm big on player autonomy normally, but issues that assume my politician is actually engaged in politics are the least of my concerns

[Candlewhisper Archive]

I'm big on player autonomy normally, but issues that assume my politician is actually engaged in politics are the least of my concerns

Sure, on the scale of player autonomy sins, its more sin-of-onanism than sin-of-mass-murder-and-eyeball-theft

[Caracasus]

Nitpicking but this option:

[option]"Have you heard of natural selection?" asks well known anarchist and flag burner @@RANDOMNAME@@. "This nation is supposed to be great, but there are so many people who live on welfare. This is just like extended welfare for the poor people. Tell the rich to prepare themselves for the apocalypse, and tell the poor that they can go and—" a small grenade in your closet explodes and you are forced to evacuate the scene.
[effect]the wealthy are rarely seen, as they live in zombie - proof shelters

It'd make more sense to refer to a well known Social Darwinist. Anarchists aren't usually known (apart from some strands of Anarcho-capitalism) for promoting a dog-eat-dog world.

If you were to go with an anarchist, it'd make more sense for them to promote community based stockpiling of supplies and suchlike, rather than a government led initiative.

[Noahs Second Country]

Alright, finished the description and the validity, after deciding to change the premise to @@LEADER@@'s supply.
Before writing the options, I'd like to get CWA's opinion on whether the description interferes too much with player autonomy.

I'd also like to know whether this is a good enough premise for an actual issue.