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[Candlewhisper Archive]

Issue 720: "Cui Bono"

“I say unto to you that the answer is more welfare, not less!” offers unemployed youth Hermione Violetsglory, pushing a shopping trolley of ammonium nitrate and diesel oil to the checkout till. “If you increase welfare, then maybe the resentful disenfranchised minorities will feel more supported by society, and become less prone to radicalisation. What have you got to lose?”

Since 'unto' is an archaic way of saying 'to', the 'to' is redundant. So it should be "I say unto you".

Cheers, fixed.

[Gnejs]

That's pretty much what we do as well

And that's why your name is poop-colored

It's 'Classy Gold'.

[G-Tech Corporation]

And that's why your name is poop-colored

It's 'Classy Gold'.

'Burnt Earwax'?

[Drasnia]

It's 'Classy Gold'.

'Burnt Earwax'?

[Aibohphobia]

This is an issue about punctuation, so I couldn't help myself.

Option 1:

ghostwriter @@RANDOMFEMALENAME@@, while

This comma is unnecessary. In the same manner, a comma wouldn't be necessary before "that": the action described in the second clause "continues" the one described in the first one (compare to the second option in this very same issue where no comma is used in a similar scenario).

but before ‘and,’

The comma here belongs outside the quotation marks, as it is part of the underlying clause, not the quotation. On another note, single quotes, at least in this particular issue, look really weird: the closing one seems to be a millimetre higher than the opening one and a tad bit darker in colour.

Additionally... What about the use of the Oxford comma in the issue itself?
The issue:

unreputable news sources, the @@NATIONALANIMAL@@ Gazette and the @@NAME@@ Times

Option 2:

can just as easily add ambiguous meaning, and just takes up space

There is no comma before the conjunction in the first example, but there is one in the second. I see how the latter could be viewed as an additional note to the main clause, but I would've personally not placed a comma there.

I am not mentioning "not correct" from Option 2, as it is probably intended. The last two options are obviously spelt the way they are on purpose as well.

Thank you.

P.S. One of the outcomes has the following line in it: "fixin' ta comma any way they wanna". Shouldn't "ta" be "tha"?

[Drasnia]

This is an issue about punctuation, so I couldn't help myself.

Option 1:

ghostwriter @@RANDOMFEMALENAME@@, while

This comma is unnecessary. In the same manner, a comma wouldn't be necessary before "that": the action described in the second clause "continues" the one described in the first one (compare to the second option in this very same issue where no comma is used in a similar scenario).

but before ‘and,’

The comma here belongs outside the quotation marks, as it is part of the underlying clause, not the quotation. On another note, single quotes, at least in this particular issue, look really weird: the closing one seems to be a millimetre higher than the opening one and a tad bit darker in colour.

Additionally... What about the use of the Oxford comma in the issue itself?
The issue:

unreputable news sources, the @@NATIONALANIMAL@@ Gazette and the @@NAME@@ Times

Option 2:

can just as easily add ambiguous meaning, and just takes up space

There is no comma before the conjunction in the first example, but there is one in the second. I see how the latter could be viewed as an additional note to the main clause, but I would've personally not placed a comma there.

I am not mentioning "not correct" from Option 2, as it is probably intended. The last two options are obviously spelt the way they are on purpose as well.

Thank you.

P.S. One of the outcomes has the following line in it: "fixin' ta comma any way they wanna". Shouldn't "ta" be "tha"?

There's actually a list of intentional mistakes in AHS' drafting thread. Careful, there are a lot!

[Candlewhisper Archive]

Any draft that says it is intentionally using a "double copula" immediately has most of the editors here turning around with a curious "Hmmmmmm...?"

Needless to say,* we'll not be editing the punctuation of this issue.


* I know.

[Ransium]

AHS said he wanted that issue to be the most frequently complained about on this thread

[Fluffard]

The first option of issue 523 needs a closing quote mark.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

The first option of issue 523 needs a closing quote mark.

Good spot. Fixed.

[Tinhampton]

...But I don’t think people should be forced to give blood; they just need incentive, that’s all...

Should be changed to "they just need an incentive"

[Candlewhisper Archive]

...But I don’t think people should be forced to give blood; they just need incentive, that’s all...

Should be changed to "they just need an incentive"

Either is fine. No change needed.

[Nyyx]

If you chose to make college free for all, option #3, Book Publishing goes down? I would assume it would go up since more people would be going to college?

[Candlewhisper Archive]

If you chose to make college free for all, option #3, Book Publishing goes down? I would assume it would go up since more people would be going to college?

It went down by a miniscule amount as a secondary effect from other stat changes. No book publishing change was coded into the issue. However, I'm not entirely keen on how some of those game engine decisions are parsed, and I think some of them are illogical, which has led to this unusual effect. I'll raise it with technical.

[Ransium]

Also, in the future, questions on stats go here:

viewtopic.php?f=13&t=370351

[Trackeendy]

Issue 708, on the third option it starts off saying “There’s no fighting in here, this a war room!”.
I assume it's supposed to say this is a war room.

[Ransium]

Issue 708, on the third option it starts off saying “There’s no fighting in here, this a war room!”.
I assume it's supposed to say this is a war room.

Huh, I can't believe you the first one pointing this out. My bad. Good spot, I'll get it fixed.

[Drasnia]

Issue 708, on the third option it starts off saying “There’s no fighting in here, this a war room!”.
I assume it's supposed to say this is a war room.

Huh, I can't believe you're the first one pointing this out. My bad. Good spot, I'll get it fixed.

FTFY

[Balkothia]

I'm not sure why the national death rate goes down after I legalized cannibalism.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

If you're going to report an error, be more specific. List the name or number of the issue, the option you chose, the nation you chose it with, and the date you made that choice. Also, if the problem is an unexpected effect, use the unexpected effects thread here:

viewtopic.php?f=13&t=370351

[Wobbegong]

Issue 622: Easter Egg: A Holiday Masquerade

Option 5: Your Defense Minister marches into the room in full parade attire, shouting jovially. “United We Can Achieve It! The new film Captain Wobbegong has seen recruitment numbers triple overnight! Do your part - Nick Patrick needs YOU! A nice shield, a big flag as a cape, you’ll be a superhero in no time! Well, minus the abs.”

I would understand if the Defense Minister told my leader: "Do your part, Nick Patrick!"
Or if they said: "Do your part, Wobbegong needs you!"

I can see if the Defense Minister was saying something like a motto to recruits, that's what the original sentence seems to be, but since the Defense Minister is talking to the leader, and telling the leader to dress up as a superhero, I don't understand.

[Candlewhisper Archive]

I think it's meant to be a reference to "Uncle Sam Needs You!", but I agree it's a bit incoherent with all the macroing.

I say "eh" to it. The meaning of the option is apparent, even if it's not phrased exactly how you or I might have edited it to.

[Norcel]

On issue 635, "Hey Kid, Have a Cigar", there is a word left out in option 2. It says, "Market restrictions are un-@@DEMONYM@@. We should be able sell our product," when it should say "be able to sell".

[Candlewhisper Archive]

On issue 635, "Hey Kid, Have a Cigar", there is a word left out in option 2. It says, "Market restrictions are un-@@DEMONYM@@. We should be able sell our product," when it should say "be able to sell".

Nice spot. Fixed.

[Trotterdam]

#724 option:

take drug dealers stuff

Missing an apostrophe after "dealers'".

#728 effect line:

the deceased are buried mostly to hide them from state-sancrtioned corpse-collectors

Threre's a superfluours letterr therer.

By the way, if you really wanted to avoid corpse collectors, wouldn't cremation work better?