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(Submited) They found the bodies

Postby Maroza » Tue Apr 12, 2011 9:54 pm

Description: During a meeting with your advisers a frantic member of the secret police runs into the office and screams "They found the bodies!" The location of the people who are "missing" was found.

Valid: for nations that have "disappearances" as a cause of deaths.

Option 1: "Oh crap!" screams the head of the secret police. "Quick, who found the bodies?! Add them to the pile!"
Effect: "People who venture to a supposed body dumping site are found to have... disappeared."
Stats: Disappearances go up, most avoided goes up, law and order spending goes up

Option 2: "Ok lets not panic, we can still get out of this without everyone getting lynched. I know for a fact that if we are going down your going down with us." says one of your body guards "I have a plan, simply blame it all on that one country we hate. You know which one I'm talking about."
Effect: The nation is getting ready to invade it's most hated enemy, however nobody seems to know exactly who that is
Stats: Military spending goes up, taxes go up, deaths from war goes up

Option 3: Silence!" your foreign relations minister shouts at he restores order. "Clearly we can now end this reign of disappearances. Clearly we have gotten rid of most people who disagreed with us. We can stop this and can cover our involvement up. Just get rid of the bodies".
Effect: The government is secretly shooting bodies across the border into Maxtopia with a giant cannon.
Stats: Most avoided goes up, law enforcement spending goes down, crime goes up, death by disappearances goes away, secret police go away, corruption goes down

Option 4: "Maybe we can tell the public what we have done. Maybe ask for forgiveness instead?" says your brother
Effect: Riots have started all over the country as people learn the government has been getting rid of dissenters and killing them.
Stats: Most avoided goes up, law enforcement spending goes down, crime goes way up, death by disappearances goes away, secret police go away, corruption goes way down
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Postby Aescentia » Tue Apr 12, 2011 11:48 pm

I think it's quite good - need some copyediting, though. I also don't think that raising taxes should be an effect for either 1 or 3.
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Postby Maroza » Wed Apr 13, 2011 8:25 am

Maybe I should also change what it says if you pick number 1.
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Postby Aescentia » Wed Apr 13, 2011 11:30 am

What do you mean, "what it says"?
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Postby Maroza » Wed Apr 13, 2011 12:15 pm

The effect.
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Postby Aescentia » Wed Apr 13, 2011 12:46 pm

Well, the 50-stab bit is good, but it could be a little clearer/better-worded.

How about "People who venture to a supposed body dumping site are found to have... disappeared."
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Postby Maroza » Wed Apr 13, 2011 1:00 pm

done
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Postby Aescentia » Wed Apr 13, 2011 1:50 pm

Some quick copyediting:

Option One: "Oh crap!" screams the head of the secret police. "Quick, who found the bodies?! Add them to the pile!"

Option Two: "OK, let's not panic, we can still get out of this without everyone getting lynched. I know for a fact that if we are going down you're going down with us," says one of your body guards. "I have a plan, just blame it all on that one country we hate. You know which one I'm talking about."

Option Three: "No, that's not enough, attack high prices!" shouts someone from the crowd, screaming what to do.

Option Four: "Silence!" your foreign relations minister shouts as he restores order. "Clearly we can now end this reign of disappearances. Obviously, we have gotten rid of most people who disagreed with us. We can stop this and cover our involvement up. Just get rid of the bodies."

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Also, now that I re-read it, option three makes very little sense overall.
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Postby Umbra Ac Silentium » Wed Apr 13, 2011 1:59 pm

Ya, I would recommend dropping #3, and adding a last option to "come clean" to the people. So, you know, for places that might want to end the disappearances and not be all sneaky about it.
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Postby Maroza » Wed Apr 13, 2011 2:20 pm

I'm keeping number three for shits and giggles and NS craziness that seems to have disappeared because I don't really see it that much anymore. I'll add a number five.
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Postby Mushet » Fri Apr 15, 2011 7:09 pm

#2 should raise the percentage of people who die in war

And I like the issue, but I urge you to take out #3, it's not funny or necessary
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Postby Maroza » Fri Apr 15, 2011 7:11 pm

Ok raise war death and take out 3.
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Postby Kalasion » Sat Apr 16, 2011 7:01 am

This is a good issue. But I think the first option can be elaborated on more. For example:

Proposed Option 1:

Option 1: "Oh crap!" screams the head of the secret police. "Quick, who found the bodies?! If this leaks to the media, we're done!We must kill this spy and add them to the pile!"
Effect: "People who venture to a supposed body dumping site are found to have... disappeared."
Stats: Disappearances go up, most avoided goes up, law and order spending goes up, corruption goes up
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Postby Aescentia » Sat Apr 16, 2011 10:01 am

Kalasion: your Option 1 is a good expansion, but more than a bit... stilted in delivery. I'll look at it, see if I can smooth it out a little.

EDIT: It really seems unnecessary - the Option1 already there is quite adequate and seems... in the NS style.
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Postby Maroza » Tue May 24, 2011 11:05 am

Just in case you were wondering it got shot down.
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Postby Maroza » Tue May 24, 2011 1:38 pm

Submitted and they didn't accept it.
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