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[CONTEST DRAFT] Airspace Oddity

Postby Dabarastan » Fri Jun 11, 2021 6:17 am

Must not have policy no airplanes

The Issue

Late yesterday afternoon, a bomb threat forced a passenger plane en route from Marche Blanche to @@CAPITAL@@ to make an emergency landing in Brasilistan. After a Brasilistani fighter jet escorted the plane full of flummoxed flyers to a military airport deep in the country’s desert, two independent @@DEMONYM@@ journalists who were passengers on the flight were hastily arrested and taken away by the Brasilistani authorities. It has since come to light that the journalists had previously written articles critical of Brasilistan’s government, and are consequently now likely being subjected to extreme torture.

1- “It’s a bloody outrage, it is!” bellows @@RANDOMNAME@@, the Marche Blanchian ambassador. “I can’t even guess how many international laws have been broken here! @@NATION@@ would be best following our country’s lead: just this morning, we’ve already announced a cancellation of all flights to and from Brasilistan, a ban on them using our airspace, and the drafting of a strongly worded letter to @@REGION@@ telling other nations to do the same!”
Effect: foreign leaders are advising that @@LEADER@@’s letters must have gotten lost in the mail

2- “Flight bans? Letters?” scoffs your top military general quizzingly. “@@LEADER@@, those Brasilistani bastards kidnapped our citizens. Frankly put, it’s an act of war. You and I both know that unless you want to look like a weakling on the world stage, there’s only one way to respond to such unprecedented aggression. I can have the troops ready by nightfall.”
Effect: unprecedented actions have unprecedented consequences

3- Your office phone rings and, surprisingly, the Brasilistani foreign minister is on the other end of the line. “Stop concerning yourselves with our internal affairs! Our security agencies received a credible threat that a bomb was on that plane, and now just for trying to keep everyone safe, the Marche Blanchians have told us we can’t use their airports anymore! Oh boy, this is going to get real ugly if @@REGION@@ gets involved. Tell you what, you provide a guarantee that we can continue to use @@DEMONYM@@ airspace no matter what, and I’ll see to it that you guys get the best prices on exports of our beautiful, shining diamonds.”
Effect: blood diamonds are @@LEADER@@’s best friend

4- “I think what the Brasilistanis did is genius,” shrewdly remarks your recently-hired secretary, handing you a bulky folder of freshly printed documents. “This here is a list of every foreign journalist who has written a slanderous piece on @@NATION@@ over the last five years. I’ve highlighted the ones who have flights booked over our airspace for the next few months, and I’ve got the number for air traffic control saved right here on my speed dial. You just say the word.”
Effect: tumbleweeds are seen blowing through the nation's airspace
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Postby Noahs Second Country » Sat Jun 12, 2021 10:00 pm

A couple of brief thoughts:

It's a bit long, especially the description.

The options are somewhat boring, as the characters are pretty bland. While they are practical and reasonable considering the scenario, try making them more fun.
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Postby Dabarastan » Sat Jun 12, 2021 10:26 pm

Noahs Second Country wrote:A couple of brief thoughts:

It's a bit long, especially the description.

The options are somewhat boring, as the characters are pretty bland. While they are practical and reasonable considering the scenario, try making them more fun.

Thanks Noah. Do you think the actual characters themselves need to change (with new roles) or just their respective tones of voice?
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