Hulldom wrote:Bumpedy bump.
Edit: Talked to someone and have adopted (in good part) the Unibot comment on the Independent Manifesto, which I hope is clearer. Additionally, reworked the Lauding clause a bit.
For what’s it worth, I like where the draft is going. At this point, it seems like a balanced draft that should be widely acceptable on the international scene. Before submitting, I would suggest taking a look at some of the comments I made about sentence structure for other clauses, but I’m sure you’re anxious to complete the vetting process and move to vote.
Good luck, btw.