[PASSED] Commend Emiline

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

At the present time the draft looks a bit.... well disorganised? But not badly so. The narrative jumps around from the nominee’s work in AA, then to their work with their puppet nations in other regions, then back to their main in URA.

Maybe aim for a better flow to the proposal.

[Thousand Branches]

So uh, this one might need a lot of rewrites because it's full of tiny little grammatical errors and word-smithing suggestions. This might take a while so lemme just get on with it. To the edits!

Exuberant at Emira Emi of Emiline’s role as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance, where Emiline oversees the day-to-day operations of the alliance as a whole. Ensuring strong central planning, unity between the regions within the Alliance, and coordination of alliance goals. which has perpetuated the flourishing of the regions therein through both influence, and World Assembly nation growth despite the difficulties of maintaining population and growth during certain periods of time.

Rewrite from the get-go. For the record, this should also probably not be the opener to this resolution, I would very much recommend an opening clause rather than just jumping right into the meat. Anyway, rewrite follows:

"Exuberant at Emiline’s role as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance, where it oversees the day-to-day operations of the alliance as a whole including ensuring strong central planning, unity between regions within the alliance, and coordination of alliance goals, therefore perpetuating the growth of the Alliance through both inter-regional influence and World Assembly nation growth."

Honestly, even with this rewrite, this clause is just a huge mess. I was trying to do this without changing the wording, but so much of this clause is straight up filler that I could write something like "Noting Emiline's leadership in the Augustin Alliance, overseeing its many regions on a day-to-day basis and ensuring the alliance's perpetual growth." and it would be entirely the same thing but like almost two lines shorter and far more concise.

Impressed that Emiline has been instrumental in ensuring the success and safety of the Augustin Alliance during the annual nuclear conflict, known to the world as N-Day, in the following ways:

1. Constructing a strong bond between the regions of Anteria and the Augustin Alliance to ensure mutually beneficial strategic operations;

2. Acting as an important mediator between other regions that were otherwise hesitant to join nonaggression pacts with the Alliance;

3.Commanding the defense forces of the Alliance, totaling zero radiation from the blasts in the fourth nuclear war;

4. Aiding the Alliance in capturing three first-place and one third-place awards in this contest;

Another rewrite for clarity and wordsmithing's sake:

"Impressed by Emiline's instrumental aid in ensuring the safety and success of the Augustin Alliance during the annual inter-factional nuclear conflict (also known as N-day), most notably by:

1. Constructing a strong bond between the regions of Anteria and the Augustin Alliance to ensure mutually beneficial strategic operations;
2. Acting as an important mediator between other factions that were otherwise hesitant to agree to non-aggression pacts with the Alliance;
3. Commanding the defense forces of the Alliance and playing an instrumental role in the 100% effective defense against radiation during the 4th N-day;
4. Aiding the Alliance in capturing three first-place and one third-place awards in this contest;"

Further thing on this clause, why the heck is AA's treaty with Anteria stuffed into a clause about N-day? I feel like it's far more notable than that.

Noting Emiline’s control of the nations of Zhengan and Prybourne,

While there is nothing gramattically wrong with this clause, it's also saying Emi is commendable for controlling nations without any context as to who those nations are. Instead of writing this here, just note them in the clauses where they're actually relevant, such as the next one.

Celebrating Zhengan’s role as founder of Anteria for six years, as an instrumental part of the rise of Anteria in the world.

Rewrite:

"Celebrating Emiline's accomplishments in the region of Anteria, including their role in founding and growing the region through the satellite state Zhengan;"

This one is relatively more edited than some other clauses but it's mostly just reorganization efforts.

Saluting the creation of the Sumo Club, which has attracted interest from many regions and introduced them to the sport of Sumo Wrestling; this is another example of innovations that Emiline has brought to the public, adding immense value to the cultural make-up of many regions.

Quick note before we start, what the heck is this clause doing here? Your last clause was about the founding of Anteria and the next was a list of stuff she did in Anteria, this straight up just doesn't belong here. If anything, I'd actually move it onto the list of Anterian accomplishments (or just move it to after all this coming stuff).

Second note, this should mention somewhere in it that Emi created the Sumo Club, unless you wish to add it to the list below. Actually with my rewrites here, I will provide both a version for a standalone clause and for a list clause:

STANDALONE:
"Acclaiming Emiline's creation of the Sumo Club, attracting incredible interest from many nations and introducing them to the sport of sumo wrestling, thereby popularizing an immense cultural custom in many regions;"

LIST:
"creating the Sumo Club, a group that has attracted incredible interest from many nations across NationStates and introduced them to the sport of sumo wrestling, thereby popularizing an immense cultural custom in many regions;"

Personally, the list one sounds way better and makes a lot more sense but of course do as you wish with my suggestions ^-^

Awestruck by Prybourne’s central role in:

1. Building the flourishing community within Anteria, which is now a mecca for world-building.

2. Encouraging the strong World Assembly presence in Anteria, which ranks 15th in the world for most average endorsements, achieved through the constant promotion of cross-endorsements in the region.

3. Establishing Anteria’s declarations of friendship with the Augustin Alliance and Karma, expanding its cultural, defense, and World Assembly cooperation with these regions/organizations.

4. Authoring Anteria’s constitutions, and creating a guide for other regions on how to effectively construct their own.
Contributing to the growth of Anteria through continuous and dedicated recruitment efforts, which is now home to over 400 nations.

This bit is very poorly organized and really needs to just use the actual list function built into the dang bbcode. Rewrite:

"Awestruck by Emiline's further role in Anteria's success through its satellite state Prybourne, contributing in such ways as:

1. Building the flourishing community within Anteria and evolving the region into a mecca for world-building.
2. Encouraging the strong World Assembly presence in Anteria (which ranks 15th in the world for most average endorsements), including the constant promotion of cross-endorsements in the region.
3. Establishing Anteria’s relations with the Augustin Alliance and Karma, expanding its cultural, defense, and World Assembly cooperation with two notable organizations.
4. Authoring Anteria’s constitutions and creating a guide for other regions on how to effectively construct their own.
5. Contributing to the growth of Anteria (which is now home to over 400 nations) through continuous and dedicated recruitment efforts."

Desiring to celebrate Emiline’s exemplary long-term success in constructing and maintaining regions and interregional alliances, seen through:

1. Emiline played a vital role in the rise of the inter-regional alliance URA, ensuring that Anteria was a founding member and active within the alliance. This ultimately gave the URA immediate legitimacy with a large region joining in a matter of weeks of its founding.
Emiline's accomplishments as the URA’s Deputy Director of Recruitment, where the recruitment of numerous new regions like The Sportbook and Portugal, have expanded the cultural reach of the alliance through the inclusion of sports-themed and multi-language regions.
2. Emiline's recent induction into the URA Hall of Fame for their hard work in ensuring the alliance as a whole grew and prospered.

At this point I may as well do a rewrite on this too xD:

"Celebrating Emiline’s exemplary long-term success in constructing and maintaining the United Regions Alliance (URA), seen through its:

1. vital role in the creation of the URA, ensuring that Anteria was an active and founding member and giving the URA immediate legitimacy by associating it with a notable region only weeks after its founding.
2. accomplishments as the URA’s deputy director of recruitment, where its recruitment of numerous new regions such as The Sportsbook and Portugal have expanded the cultural reach of the alliance through the inclusion of sports-themed and multi-language regions.
3. recent induction into the URA Hall of Fame for its hard work in securing the long-term growth and prosperity of the alliance."

So uh... when I said "there might be a lot of rewrites", I really meant "everything is gonna be rewritten I'm so sorry ;-; Anyway, I'm just gonna provide a copy of the full rewritten version here because I imagine that might be mildly easier to look at:

The Security Council,

Exuberant at Emiline’s role as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance, where it oversees the day-to-day operations of the alliance as a whole including ensuring strong central planning, unity between regions within the alliance, and coordination of alliance goals, therefore perpetuating the growth of the Alliance through both inter-regional influence and World Assembly nation growth.

Impressed by Emiline's instrumental aid in ensuring the safety and success of the Augustin Alliance during the annual inter-factional nuclear conflict (also known as N-day), most notably by:

1. Constructing a strong bond between the regions of Anteria and the Augustin Alliance to ensure mutually beneficial strategic operations;
2. Acting as an important mediator between other factions that were otherwise hesitant to agree to non-aggression pacts with the Alliance;
3. Commanding the defense forces of the Alliance and playing an instrumental role in the 100% effective defense against radiation during the 4th N-day;
4. Aiding the Alliance in capturing three first-place and one third-place awards in this contest;

Celebrating Emiline's accomplishments in the region of Anteria, including their role in founding and growing the region through the satellite state Zhengan;

Awestruck by Emiline's further role in Anteria's success through its satellite state Prybourne, contributing in such ways as:

1. Building the flourishing community within Anteria and evolving the region into a mecca for world-building.
2. Encouraging the strong World Assembly presence in Anteria (which ranks 15th in the world for most average endorsements), including the constant promotion of cross-endorsements in the region.
3. Establishing Anteria’s relations with the Augustin Alliance and Karma, expanding its cultural, defense, and World Assembly cooperation with two notable organizations.
4. Authoring Anteria’s constitutions and creating a guide for other regions on how to effectively construct their own.
5. Contributing to the growth of Anteria (which is now home to over 400 nations) through continuous and dedicated recruitment efforts.
6. Creating the Sumo Club, a group that has attracted incredible interest from many nations across NationStates and introduced them to the sport of sumo wrestling, thereby popularizing an immense cultural custom in many regions;

Celebrating Emiline’s exemplary long-term success in constructing and maintaining the United Regions Alliance (URA), seen through its:

1. vital role in the creation of the URA, ensuring that Anteria was an active and founding member and giving the URA immediate legitimacy by associating it with a notable region only weeks after its founding.
2. accomplishments as the URA’s deputy director of recruitment, where its recruitment of numerous new regions such as The Sportsbook and Portugal have expanded the cultural reach of the alliance through the inclusion of sports-themed and multi-language regions.
3. recent induction into the URA Hall of Fame for its hard work in securing the long-term growth and prosperity of the alliance.

Hereby commends Emiline.

Co-authored by Polder Eiland, DiRito-Opolis, and Lesser Velutaria.

Well that was fun, hope these were helpful! Have a great day,

-A

[Free Azell]

Thanks, everyone for the feedback. A major rewrite and reorganization is coming in the next few days.

[Not A Plant]

I'm not really involved with anything anymore but I'll be watching for this to come to vote. Emi deserves a hurrah. Id also like to see a mention or nod for her role in helping to develop new nations and leaders in NS. I know she has given a lot of advice to smaller regions through NSL, URA and other means on top of her guide for writting constitutions.

My only critism is over all it's a pretty dry, it need a little personality to really make the commend pop. Emi is such a wonderful personality in the spaces she is in that It would be remise not to try and include some of that in this. All in all great candidate, and looking forward to the finished product.

[Free Azell]

I have released Draft 2. I have tried to address most of the issues in the first draft and added some things to the draft as well.

[Honeydewistania]

There’s a formatting error in the ‘Recognising’ clause

[Free Azell]

There’s a formatting error in the ‘Recognising’ clause

Should be fixed.

[Scalizagasti]

[list=1][*]Helping to build its flourishing and highly-regarded worldbuilding community, which allows for nations to share in detail their history, culture, and language development within Anteria. Even offer theme week events to expand the worldbuilding experience,

Having a full stop here breaks the flow for readers. Consider making the part about week events its own subpoint alongside some other things Emi has done to "expand the worldbuilding experience"

[*]Establishing Anteria’s declarations of friendship with the AA and Karma, expanding Anteria's cultural, defense, and World Assembly cooperation with these regions and organizations,

Desiring to celebrate Emiline’s exemplary long-term success in helping to recruit new and diverse regions to the URA (such as the sports-focused region of The Sportsbook and the multilingual region of Portugal) as its Deputy Director of Recruitment—work which helped ensure that the whole URA grew and prospered, andfor which they were recently inducted into the URA's Hall of Fame, and

Minor grammar suggestions.

Convinced that Emiline's work to further culture, creativity, constructive regional growth, and common-sense foreign policy throughout the world deserves to be recognized:

Are there missing subclauses here or something? What's with the colon? Some subclauses could be added though, this argument is painfully vague. Elaborate on the specific work done to "further culture, creativity, constructive regional growth, and common-sense foreign policy."

Exuberant at Emira Emi of Emiline’s ongoing service as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance (also known as the AA), where they oversee its day-to-day operations by implementing strong central planning, promoting unity between the AA's member regions, and coordinating the AA's goals—work which has helped perpetuate the growth of the AA, its influence and World Assembly population even during the most challenging periods,

The (also known as the AA) part should be in the Recognizing clause since that's where you first mention the AA, and the hyphen should be an em dash. More importantly, I think the point here is good but needs expanding. What measures have created "strong central planning," promoted unity, and coordinated the AA's goals? If no specific policy/change in policy exists, what examples do you have of these feats?

Impressed at Emiline's instrumental role in ensuring the AA's success and safety during the first five editions of the annual nuclear conflict known to the world as N-Day, where it captured three first-place and one third-place award in total (in addition to avoiding all radiation during the fourth N-Day); including through constructing a strong and mutually beneficial strategic bond between the AA and Anteria, as well as acting as an important mediator between the AA and other regions that may have otherwise hesitated to join nonaggression pacts with it,

The last part of this clause is a bit tricky to read. Perhaps reword it to something like "acting as an important mediator between the AA and regions otherwise hesistant to sign a mutual nonaggression pact."

Overall a good draft and a worthy commendee, it just needs to be more specific.

[Giovanniland]

Feedback time!

In regards to the first clause and its items, I think it's listy and has lots of different things together, so splitting them off into groups would probably work better. The introduction would mention the general areas they have put effort into, followed by specific clauses. Here's my take on it, though you're of course free to write it in a different way:

Recognizing Emiline, also known by the aliases of Zhengan (the founder nation of Anteria) and Prybourne, as a nation that has dedicated time and effort into region-building, culture, interregional alliances, and much more,

Lauding Emiline's elaboration of the immense and unique world of Anteria lore that ensured the region to stand out as a unique region that attracts a variety of citizens from many different cultures and languages, and their help in building Anteria's flourishing and highly-regarded worldbuilding community, which allows for nations to share in detail their history, culture, and language development within Anteria, often through theme week events organized by Emiline to expand the worldbuilding experience;

Praising Emiline's creation of the Sumo Club, which has attracted interest from many regions and introduced them to the sport of Sumo Wrestling, as one of their great innovations which have added immense value to the cultural make-up of many regions,

Impressed by Emiline's constant promotion of strong, active, and security-focused World Assembly presence in Anteria, which now ranks 15th in the world for most average endorsements, as well as their governmental actions such as authoring Anteria’s constitutions and creating a comprehensive guide for other regions on how to effectively construct their own,

Applauding Emiline's work in building relations between Anteria and other regions, best exemplified by Anteria’s declarations of friendship with the Augustin Alliance (AA) and Karma that expanded cultural and World Assembly cooperation; and by Emiline's introduction of Anteria as a founding member of the United Regions Alliance (URA), an interregional alliance and World Assembly voting bloc, a move which no doubt granted the URA widespread legitimacy and recognition,

I also agree that it's best to not mention the defense part, and instead focus on other parts like culture and WA.

Desiring to celebrate Emiline’s exemplary long-term success in helping to recruit new and diverse regions to the URA (such as the sports-focused region of The Sportsbook and the multilingual region of Portugal) as its Deputy Director of Recruitment, for example the sports-focused region of The Sportsbook and the multilingual region of Portugal, work which helped helping to ensure that the whole URA grew and prospered, and for which they were recently inducted into the URA's Hall of Fame, and

The first few changes are to help the flow of the clause. Regarding the Hall of Fame mention, I'm not a fan of mentioning awards in commendations since they're 1) already an award themselves, and 2) you have already mentioned why they gained the award.

Exuberant at Emira Emi of Emiline’s ongoing service as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance (also known as the AA) AA, where they oversee its day-to-day operations by implementing strong central planning, promoting unity between the AA's member regions, and coordinating the AA's goals, work which has helped helping to perpetuate the growth of the AA, its influence and World Assembly population even during the most challenging periods,

Minor stylistic changes here, the AA is already mentioned earlier so it can be abbreviated here. I agree with Scalizagasti that this clause could use some expanding.

Impressed at Emiline's instrumental role in ensuring the AA's success and safety during the first five editions of the annual nuclear conflict known to the world as N-Day, where it captured three first-place and one third-place award in total, (in addition to avoiding all radiation during the fourth N-Day); extraordinary feats achieved including through constructing a strong and mutually beneficial strategic bond between the AA and Anteria, as well as acting as an important mediator between the AA and other regions that may have otherwise hesitated to join nonaggression pacts with it,

Some minor changes too, I think the parentheses there are unnecessary and sort of diminish the achievement when it's a notable feat to mention.

I think you're on the right track here, with some edits and more details this will turn into a great resolution for a definitely worthy nominee. Your current draft has 3,405 characters so there's definitely room for more content. Good luck

[Guess and Check]

I think Emi is commendable, and I think this draft is at the starting point towards justifying a commend. But it needs a lot of work to get there.

Some general notes before I go into the specific feedback:

• You need to elaborate more on a lot of things. Don't be afraid to split things into seperate clauses to further explore them. I agree with Gio that the gigantic list at the top of the proposal can be broken down into smaller lists or clauses - focusing on RP, or FA, etc.
• Also, assume the reader has no idea what any of these entities or events you keep mentioning are, and make sure to elaborate on them accordingly. For example, "URA" is never expounded as "the United Regions Alliance", or people like me may not know what a theme week in Anteria actually entails.
• From a narrative standpoint, your clauses about roleplay don't make sense sometimes. It's important to remember that we commend people as nations. Nations do not create their national histories or the lore of their region, they observe, record, and spread it. There is nothing legally wrong afaik by saying "X nation built up Anteria's lore as a regional world", it just feels weird to say both because IRL nations just don't create their lore (unless they're editing history for propaganda purposes) and it's against the precedent we have for RP C/Cs.
• There's a lot of grammar issues and weird sentence structures. I avoided posting anything on that because I think this needs a lot more revision and I feel that'd make grammar suggestions I may make now moot. But yeah, try to make your draft flow better (recent passed SC proposals guide you a lot with this).

Again, overall a good start, but you have a lot of work ahead of you to improve this resolution, both to pass the SC vote and to do your nominee justice.

Now, feedback:

the Security Council,

Nitpicking but could capitalize the T to fit the standard SC stuff.

I would also suggest having a clause right after SC, but before the list, basically summarizing what this proposal is about. Kinda like a thesis statement in an essay - explaining the resolution's general argument. It helps the reader know what the resolution will generally be about. Looking at recently passed SC resolutions should give an idea of what I mean

Helping to build its flourishing and highly-regarded worldbuilding community, which allows for nations to share in detail their history, culture, and language development within Anteria. Even offering theme week events to expand the worldbuilding experience,

This could use some elaboration - how exactly did Emi actually build this community?

I'm also a bit confused on what these "theme weeks" exactly are - the theme events I know typically ask people to change their flags to a set theme, and I'm not sure how that's related to worldbuilding... leading me to assume I'm not understanding the term and therefore it needs more explanation.

Development of the immense and unique world of Anteria lore that ensured Anteria standouts as a unique region that attracts a variety of citizens that are from many different cultures and speak a variety of languages,

While I understand that establishing regional lore is a good thing, I feel the first clause is also too broad - what parts of Anteria's lore did Emi actually develop? I'm also not sure the impact (that the lore is good for recruitment) is particularly notable - many regions have some kinds of regional lore or theme that attracts people... that's a mainstay point of founding a good region. I'd reword the impact to focus less on "we attract a diverse crowd" to "Anteria is more inclusive as a result of its diverse lore" or something on those lines.

Creation of the Sumo Club, which has attracted interest from many regions and introduced them to the sport of Sumo Wrestling, as one of their great innovations which have added immense value to the cultural make-up of many regions,

This is great, and I'm sure Emi has done more than merely creating it. What else did Emi do for the club? I'd also reword the second clause as "bolstering many regional cultures in the process" to keep it shorter.

Constantly promoting a strong, active, and security-focused World Assembly presence in the region, which now ranks 15th in the world for most average endorsements,

Again, solid but needs more elaboration on the action. How did they promote this? What did they do, specifically? While the impact is unique to Anteria (15th is no number to mock), the idea of promoting a WA presence is common amongst many regions. It would be better to explain why Emi's work has made Anteria so successful in this regard, rather than just saying "yeah, she somehow got Anteria up to this".

Establishing Anteria’s declarations of friendship with the AA and Karma, expanding further cementing its cultural, defense, and World Assembly cooperation with these regions and organizations,

Spell out "AA".

Introducing Anteria as a founding member of the URA, an interregional alliance and World Assembly voting bloc, a move which no doubt granted the URA widespread legitimacy and recognition, and

I'm not sure this is commendable - I think the fact this helped the URA is cool, but because this clause focuses on Anteria, this is superfluous. I would instead explain why joining the URA has helped Anteria in the long-run, in replacement of the "a move which no doubt..." subclause. Also, spell out URA.

Not only authoring Anteria’s constitutions but also creating a comprehensive guide for other regions on how to effectively construct their own,

I think you could really explore this a lot more. How did Anteria's constitutions change under Emi? What was the result? More effective government, more representative government, etc? I also think the structure of "Not only... but..." is a bit unusual in an SC proposal albeit not harmful. Just something to note.

Desiring to celebrate Emiline’s exemplary long-term success in helping to recruit new and diverse regions to the URA (such as the sports-focused region of The Sportsbook and the multilingual region of Portugal) as its Deputy Director of Recruitment - work which helped ensure that the whole URA grew and prospered, and for which they were recently inducted into the URA's Hall of Fame, and

Hasn't Sportsbook left the URA? If so, may be better to choose another example.

I am a supporter of recognizing work even if it was later undone, so I don't think it's absolutely necessary to switch out Sportsbook, but another region Emi recruited which is still in the URA today would be a more potent example IMO.

Exuberant at Emira Emi of Emiline’s ongoing service as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance (also known as the AA), where they oversee its day-to-day operations by implementing strong central planning, promoting unity between the AA's member regions, and coordinating the AA's goals - work which has helped perpetuate the growth of the AA, its influence and World Assembly population even during the most challenging periods,

I feel like there's a lot more that can be said behind these actions like "implementing... planning", or "coordinating goals", and etc. You could make a couple more clauses explaining Emi's work in the AA, rather than shoving it into one clause.

Impressed at Emiline's instrumental role in ensuring the AA's success and safety during the first five editions of the annual nuclear conflict known to the world as N-Day, where it captured three first-place and one third-place award in total (in addition to avoiding all radiation during the fourth N-Day); including through constructing a strong and mutually beneficial strategic bond between the AA and Anteria, as well as acting as an important mediator between the AA and other regions that may have otherwise hesitated to join nonaggression pacts with it,

I think this reads a bit wonky and could do with a rework to flow better.

Hereby COMMENDS Emiline.

Would suggest adding a clause right before this that summarizes your argument - like how one restates a thesis in the conclusion. Infact, I think the line "Convinced that Emiline's work to further culture, creativity, constructive regional growth, and common-sense foreign policy throughout the world deserves to be recognized:" would be a great start to move to the ending clause area, and building up on that as well as replacing it with something else in its former position.

[Free Azell]

The third draft has been released. I tried to follow as much of the advice as I could in this draft. Thank you everyone who has commented.

[Apatosaurus]

Helping to build its flourishing and highly-regarded worldbuilding community, which allows for nations to share in detail their history, culture, and language development within Anteria.

Complete rewrite:

Building its flourishing and highly-regarded worldbuilding community, allowing nations to share in detail their history, culture, and language development within the region,

Worked diligently to help to spread the immense and unique world of Anteria lore that ensured Anteria standouts as a unique region that attracts a variety of citizens that are from many different cultures and speak a variety of languages,

"Anteria lore" --> "regional lore", "variety of languages" --> "variety of different languages"

Creation of the Sumo Club, which has attracted interest from many regions and introduced them to the sport of Sumo Wrestling, as one of their great innovations which have added immense value to the cultural make-up of many regions,by which they host events, discussions and watch parties to bring more attention to the sport of Sumo Wrestling.

Rewrite:

Founding the Sumo Club, which has attracted interest from many regions and introduced them to the sport of Sumo Wrestling, as one of their great innovations which have added immense value to the cultural make-up of many regions, hosting events, discussions and watch parties to promote Sumo Wrestling,

Applauding Emiline’s Introduction of Anteria as a founding member of the URA, an interregional alliance and World Assembly voting bloc known as United Regions Alliance, a move which no doubt granted the URA widespread legitimacy and recognition, and brought Anteria into the forefront as a leader in inter-regional politics and exposure in the great realms of the world stage.

Try this:

Applauding Emiline’s Introduction of Anteria as a founding member of the interregional alliance and World Assembly voting bloc known as the United Regions Alliance (URA), a move which undoubtedly granted the URA widespread legitimacy and recognition, and brought Anteria into the forefront as a leader in inter-regional politics and exposure in the great realms of the world stage,

Exuberant at Emira Emi of Emiline’s ongoing service as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance, where they oversee its day-to-day operations by ...

Rewrite:

Extolling Emiline's ongoing service as an Administrator in the Augustin Alliance, an interregional alliance of regions that are closely allied and co-governed, where they have overseen its day-to-day operations by ...

Convinced that Emiline's work to further culture, creativity, constructive regional growth, and common-sense foreign policy throughout the world deserves to be recognized, Including:

1. Establishing Anteria’s declarations of friendship with the Augustin Alliance (also known as the AA) and Karma, expanding its cultural and World Assembly cooperation them,
2. Not only authoring Anteria’s constitutions but also creating a comprehensive guide for other regions on how to effectively construct their own, In doing so changed the government structure to ensure officials are held more accountable for doing there jobs within the region.

Try this:

Convinced that Emiline's work to further culture, creativity, constructive regional growth, and common-sense foreign policy throughout the world deserves to be recognized, most notably:
[list=1][*]Establishing Anteria’s declarations of friendship with the Augustin Alliance and Karma, expanding its cultural and World Assembly cooperation with them,
[*]Authoring Anteria’s constitutions, and
[*]Creating a comprehensive guide for other regions on how to effectively construct their own, In doing so changed the government structure to ensure officials are held more accountable for doing their jobs within the region,

I'm also confused as to why this goes in its own clause, rather than the Anteria clause?

[Free Azell]

The updated draft is posted. Hopefully, we are a lot closer now to moving this forward.

[Fachumonn]

Is there any reason for the first list being 1, 2, 3, and the second list being normal/bullets? IDK, looks a little weird.

[Free Azell]

Is there any reason for the first list being 1, 2, 3, and the second list being normal/bullets? IDK, looks a little weird.
Other than that, full support!

TBH didn't notice that. Its fixed now.

[Free Azell]

Bump

[Apatosaurus]

You can't cite co-authors who are CTE because of how the co-author mechanic works, so you might want to ask Jinkies to revive Polder Eiland.

[Free Azell]

Yeah, I just noticed that. Messaging them now.

[Free Azell]

Made a few changes and rewordings. Hoping to submit it tomorrow if all looks good.

[Fachumonn]

Good luck on the vote!

[Free Azell]

Thank you!

[FNR WA Office]

The Free Nations Region has voted AGAINST this proposal:

We are unable to support this Commendation for a variety of reasons. Its writing is generally poor, and uses excessive filler to attempt to cover up for its lack of relevant material, to be blunt. Furthermore, both Anteria and the Augustin Alliance have had Out-Of-Character issues making it harder to support this resolution.

[Fachumonn]

The Libertarian Socialist Confederation has voted FOR this proposal.

[Varanius]

The Free Nations Region has voted AGAINST this proposal:

We are unable to support this Commendation for a variety of reasons. Its writing is generally poor, and uses excessive filler to attempt to cover up for its lack of relevant material, to be blunt. Furthermore, both Anteria and the Augustin Alliance have had Out-Of-Character issues making it harder to support this resolution.

(emphasis mine)

[Apatosaurus]

The Free Nations Region has voted AGAINST this proposal:

I approved it because a friend asked me to do so. That does not mean that I necessarily support it, or that the internal vote was for.