Uan aa Boa wrote:Boston Castle wrote:Member nations may not ban, blacklist, or impose legal penalties for affiliation with any organization that does not spread a message of violence or hate or that intends to undertake a crime against another person's life or well-being or private or state-owned property.
I still think you need to pick your words carefully here. It's open to the interpretation that nations can't ban an organisation (a) that doesn't spread a message of hate or (b) that intends a crime. It would be clearer to put a "not" in both (a) and (b) or be more clear that the initial "not" applies to both clauses.
And seriously, what's the rush to submit? I don't mean this in an overly critical way but if in a short period you've been shown 3 things that make you say "good catch" you're not 24 hours from submission.
And read the above where I’m putting it off for a few days.
As for that quibble, I don’t necessarily agree. I think that language is fine as is.