Syberis wrote:Honestly, this is a well-written draft that focuses on the community-building and maintaining that Kuriko thrives at. I would give my unreserved support if it weren't for one thing.
This line.Noting that among nations who are successful in many different facets of NationStates, Kuriko and any subsidiaries or aliases thereof are incredibly prominent,
My response to this can be encapsulated in a single meme.
This is a commend, we don't need a line stating this, if this wasn't the case there would be no resolution at all. A small nitpick, to be sure, but I feel like it's filler, and I don't like starting any legislation or resolution with filler. To the casual reader it doesn't set a good tone for the rest of the work.
Admittedly, this is a flaw of mine - I never know how to start an SC proposal. I like to give a little establishment of what specifically the c/c will be about, which is what that line is - I don't think it works without it. I'm open to suggestions of rewording it so that I can take it out, but I feel like as-is, it needs to stay in order to maintain the flow of the proposal.