Marxist Germany wrote:Recognising that forced sterilisation can have detrimental effects on the individual;
OOC: No shit. However, you shouldn't leave it that vague. I really suggest looking up first-hand stories of people who were sterilized against their will, and how that affected them. Can't direct you to the documentary I saw on the subject as it was in Finnish and wouldn't help you much, but I'm sure there's stuff in English somewhere on the Net. (Try Native American resources.)
Noting that sterilisation against an individual's will continues to be used as a method of reducing population in some member-states;
If you're going for civil rights, leave the population control out entirely. Go for individual level.
Acknowledging that each individual should have the right to choose reproduce or not;
With the addition of
"as long as it does not violate another individual's right to choose" that would be good, because you don't want to end up in the situation where a spouse is forced to have a child against their will just because the other spouse wanted one. Because that
would be used as a counter argument for this justification, trust me.
Seeking to ban this form of population control and genocide of minorities;
No. You're being too vague. Remember that you're going up against people who think its a good idea to sterilize people like pedophiles and whatnot, so they don't pollute the genepool. And again, leave the population control aspect out entirely. And remember that genocide has already been banned, so you need to go for something like
"has been, in the past, used to get rid of people the society has considered to be unwanted members, whether they were sexual or ethnic minorities or people with specific disabilities".
Defines, for the purpose of this resolution; "sterilisation" as the elimination of an individual's ability to reproduce, permanently or temporarily; by removing or altering their reproductive organs;
You realize that this wouldn't catch at least one if not two existing sterilization methods? Also, why "temporarily" is included? Go for the proper normally understood meaning of "sterilization" which is meant to be permanent.
Prohibits member-states from sterilising any individual without their consent, unless the parent or guardian of a minor consents on their behalf;
I'd change that to
"unless a parent or guardian is legally able to consent on their behalf", because there are cases where someone over the age of maturity might not have the mental capacity to understand these things, and in some such cases it might actually be for the good of the individual for them to be sterilized but they would not have the mental capacity to consent and might have a court-appointed guardian managing their healthcare.
Requires that member states criminalise the act of sterilising another individual against their will unless it falls under an exception mentioned in the previous clauses.
There's only one previous clause with an exception, not several.