Hey great work on this! Im really interested in water and have been researching it as part of my PhD over the past 3 years, so I may have gone a little overboard here but I have a few potential suggestions. Im not sure where you are up to with the process and with edits so Ill just put down some of my ideas.
The previous resolution on Clear water was repealed in 2010
https://forum.nationstates.net/viewtopic.php?p=2861642#p2861642This means that the WA has no resolution concerning water other than the resolution on transboundary resources. I would highlight this in a preamble. Stressing the need for a good resolution here. In particular in order to ensure compliance with other resolutions adopted by the WA. In particular highlighting:
1) the Quality in Health Services Resolution which establishes that national health authorities are responsible for eradication of endemic diseases and implementation of basic sanitation projects both of which can be severely compromised in the absence of clean water supply.
2) the Right to Adequate Sanitation Resolution which requires member nations to provide safe sanitation which can be compromised under situations of water scarcity.
3) Sustainable Fishing Act for which a freshwater shortage or serious water pollution can be detrimental to long-term viability of fish populations.
4) Wetland Protection Protocol which encourages member state to create and fund water management programs to mitigate impacts on and maintain quality of wetlands which could be impacted under situations of water scarcity.
I would potentially change the title to refer to "environmental freshwater and water supply shortages" or something in this direction where we are talking about water resources in terms of both freshwater in the environment as well as clean potable water supply.
For clause 1:
"Greywater" typically refers to wastewater. This may not be applicable for irrigation where potable water quality is typically used. I think what you mean by greywater in this context is "non-potable reuse". So for example taking household wastewater through a simple treatment process on site and then reusing it for toilet flushing or garden watering or car cleaning or something. In industry its quite common to reuse process water because you need a particular quality or you dont need more expensive potable water.
So when saying recycling rainwater it implies reusing it as in water reuse. I would just write rainwater harvesting.
for clause 2:
Monitoring water supply reservoirs is typically done on a much more regular basis than annually. You should have at least weekly data on reservoir levels although this is usually simply left to the operator to do and they are assigned the responsibility for sufficient monitoring and operation. They will most likely have daily if not hourly data. I would just say they should base their decisions off of monthly data at the least.
Two additional problems with monitoring.
1) what if there is insufficient capacity to effectively monitor? I would assign this to the JWRMP or the World Assembly Development Foundation (WADF) to make reviews of the need for capacity building in WA member states who ask for it. The World Health Authority could be involved to support monitoring of water related diseases.
2) what if the water resource is significantly outside the jurisdiction of the agency meant to monitor? Here we could appeal to the Transboundary Water Resources Resolution to say that as part of managing transboundary water resources where water supply is involved there must be transboundary water monitoring information made available.
For clause 3:
a: why just focus on blue water footprint? If you mention pollution in the preambs you want to talk about the total water footprint including blue (consumption), green (evapotranspiration) and grey (pollution). For most countries green water footprint is the dominant source of water consumption far outstripping industry and domestic.
for clause 5:
the key thing is long term integrated planning. If you build another reservoir you can store up more water and prevent a drought leading to supply shortages. Also there is no mention of integrate water resources management (IWRM). This is a big concept in water. I would definitely include that. Alternatively you may want to simplify 5 so that you simply clearly place the responsibility on national governments to ensure adequate water for sapiens and environmental needs. If they cannot deliver it then they need to have a way to get help from abroad quickly.
for clause 6:
this makes it sound like hazardous wastes released by business is bad but not by individuals. I also think the intentional aspect of it is too lenient. It should be strict liability. I would just "prohibits any releases of hazardous waste into any body of water". The question of what a hazardous waste is then becomes important but i guess a reasonable person can see what it is.
clause 7:
a: I expect the JWRMP will not have the resources. Maybe they coordinate the response with other WA agencies and bodies such as those mentioned throughout.
b: this will not be acceptable to any sovereignty loving country. I would say 'recommend' limits not 'set' limits.
c: Again i dont expect JWRMP to have the resources. This is really development assistance which the WADF could help with.
d: JWRMP and WADF can support national authorities in rolling out "precision irrigation technologies" or other technologies and techniques.
Let me know what you think about this. Am happy to help redraft if you put me as co-author!