[PASSED] Commend Zwangzug

[Frisbeeteria]

A few notes/questions:

1. Getting the balance between RP stuff and Zwangzug's other achievements right is very important to me. In particular, I wanted to have at least a couple examples of Zwangzug's sports RP, but I didn't want to go overboard. Let me know what you think, I could definitely add more.
2. The "praising" clause is in reference to Cassadaigua telling me via TG that the idea for a men's right movement in Cassa was first inspired by something Zwangzug RPed. I don't think the RP was literally promoting of the men's right movement, but Zwangzug RPed its existence and Casa ran with the idea. I'd be interested to hear whether you guys think this clause is appropriate. I will TG Cassa to make sure they are okay with it as well. They seem okay with it.
3. I'm worried the list of liberated regions is too long... your thoughts?
4. Does the 'Valuing' clause add anything? Should it be cut?

Let me know if you have any other questions or comments!

Draft 6: Added a 'thesis clause, some reordering and rewording.

The World Assembly,

Admiring the numerous positive impacts the nation of Zwangzug has had on several aspects of the NationStates community, including international athletics, liberating occupied regions, and advocacy of issues that confront world leaders;

Appreciating Zwangzug's efforts to further international athletics via hosting a multitude of sporting events, including the World Baseball Classic 3, the '12 FairPlay Trophy, the '12 and '13 NationStates World Fair Sports Tournament, the '13 TriWrathlon, and the World Cup of Hockey 16;

Noting Zwangzug's invaluable planning and logistics provided to both the World Baseball Classic and NationStates World Fair;

Further appreciating en passant assistance given by Zwangzug to other nation's sports tournament hosting efforts, via proliferating information of basic practices for scorekeeping;

Recognizing the incredible prowess of the athletes of Zwangzug in baseball, as well as Zwangzug's pawns Aguazul and Earent in soccer, and Plutoni in hockey, accounting for multiple world championships in multiple sports, most impressively Aguazul's four World Cup wins, including an as of yet unmatched three in a row;

Feeling that exceeding the talent in athletics in the above nations' is the talent in sports journalism, which is famous among the NationStates Community not only for reporting of the athletics on the field, but also using the lens of athletics to illustrate national culture, provide humor, interweave international affairs, and even incorporate mathematical theory;

Admiring that despite the checkered experience of Aguazul in World Cup 54, including the mid-tournament murder by dinosaurs of emblematic General, Carlos Lopez, the nation was still able to co-host World Cup 55;

Praising Zwangzug's commitment to civil rights and equality as demonstrated by assisting in the organization of a men's rights group in Cassadaigua;

Astounded that Zwangzug is also accomplished at protecting regions from occupation and liberating occupied regions, demonstrated by achieving the rank of Lieutenant in the United Defenders League, being awarded Liberator of the Month in March 2012, participating in such notable liberations as ITALIA, Norway, Liberal Haven, Hong Kong, Christmas, Roman Empire, and Italy, as well as acting as a protective castle to countless other regions via their early spotting of potential invading forces;

Awestruck that, in addition, Zwangzug is a talented issue advocate, demonstrated by bringing the following issues to world leaders' attention:

• Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
• Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
• National censuses via Your Nation Taking Leave Of Its Census;

Believing strongly that a nation that has made such positive contributions in so many different areas of the multiverse deserves international recognition;

Hereby commends Zwangzug.

Co-authored by Bordurian Islands

[Ransium]

Draft 4: A few cuts for length consideration.

The World Assembly,

Recognizing the incredible prowess of the athletes of Zwangzug in baseball, as well as Zwangzug's pawns Aguazul and Earent in soccer, and Plutoni in hockey, accounting for multiple world championships in multiple sports on the world stage, most impressively Aguazul's four World Cup wins including an as of yet unmatched three in a row;

Feeling that exceeding the above nations' talent in athletics is the talent in sports journalism, which is famous among the NationStates Community not only for reporting of the athletics on the field, but also using the lens of athletics to illustrate national culture, provide humor, interweave international affairs, and even incorporate mathematical theory;

Appreciating the efforts to further international athletics via hosting a multitude of sporting events, including the World Baseball Classic 3, the '12 FairPlay Trophy, the 12 and '13 NationStates World Fair Sports Tournament, the '13 TriWrathlon, and the World Cup of Hockey 16;

Further appreciating en passant assistance given by Zwangzug to other nation's hosting efforts via proliferating information of basic practices for score keeping;

Admiring that despite the checkered experience of Aguazul in World Cup 54, including mid-tournament murder by dinosaurs of emblematic General, Carlos Lopez, the nation was still able to co-host World Cup 55;

Praising Zwangzug's commitment to civil rights and equality as demonstrated by assisting in the organization of a men's rights group in Cassadaigua;

Noting Zwangzug's invaluable planning and logistics provided to both the World Baseball Classic and the NationStates World Fair;

Astounded that Zwangzug is also an accomplished defender, demonstrated by achieving the rank of Lieutenant in the United Defenders League, being awarded Liberator of the Month in March 2012, participating in such notable liberations as ITALIA, Norway, Liberal Haven, Hong Kong, Christmas, Roman Empire, and Italy, as well as acting as a protective castle to countless other regions via their spotting activities;

Awestruck that in addition to these accomplishments Zwangzug is also a talented issue advocate, bringing the following issues to kings, queens, and other world leaders' attention:

• Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
• Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
• National censuses via Your Nation Taking Leave Of Its Census;

Believing strongly that a nation that has made such positive contributions in so many different areas of the multiverse deserves international recognition;

Hereby commends Zwangzug.

Co-authored by Bordurian Islands[/box]

Previous drafts:
Changed from draft 2 to draft 3: Added chess pawns puns.

The World Assembly,

Aware the nation of Zwangzug is a special nation, having positively impacted the NationStates Community in a variety of ways;

Recognizing the incredible prowess of the athletes of Zwangzug in baseball, as well as Zwangzug's pawns Aguazul and Earent in soccer, and Plutoni in hockey, accounting for multiple world championships in multiple sports on the world stage, most impressively Aguazul's four World Cup wins including an as of yet unmatched three in a row;

Feeling that exceeding the above nations' talent in athletics is the talent in sports journalism, which is famous among the NationStates Community not only for reporting of the athletics on the field, but also using the lens of athletics to illustrate national culture, provide humor, interweave international affairs, and even incorporate mathematical theory;

Appreciating the efforts to further international athletics via hosting a multitude of sporting events, including the World Baseball Classic 3, the '12 FairPlay Trophy, the 12 and '13 NationStates World Fair Sports Tournament, the '13 TriWrathlon (which included "Blood-Curdling Hurdles", "Raging Barricades", and "Great Weights"), and the World Cup of Hockey 16;

Further appreciating en passant assistance given by Zwangzug to other nation's hosting efforts via proliferating information of basic practices for score keeping;

Admiring that despite the checkered experience of Aguazul in World Cup 54, including mid-tournament murder by dinosaurs of emblematic General, Carlos Lopez, the nation was still able to co-host World Cup 55;

Praising Zwangzug's commitment to civil rights and equality as demonstrated by assisting in the organization of a men's rights group in Cassadaigua;

Noting Zwangzug's invaluable planning and logistics provided to both the World Baseball Classic and the NationStates World Fair;

Astounded that Zwangzug is also an accomplished defender, demonstrated by achieving the rank of Lieutenant in the United Defenders League, being awarded Liberator of the Month in March 2012, participating in such notable liberations as ITALIA, Norway, Corporate Profit Alliance, Liberal Haven, Hong Kong, Christmas, Roman Empire, Italy, Pirates, Space, and The Islamic Republic of Iran, as well as acting as a protective castle to countless other regions via their spotting activities;

Awestruck that in addition to these accomplishments Zwangzug is also a talented issue advocate, bringing the following issues to kings, queens, and other world leaders' attention:

• Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
• Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
• National censuses via Your Nation Taking Leave Of Its Census;

Believing strongly that a nation that has made such positive contributions in so many different areas of the multiverse deserves international recognition;

Hereby commends Zwangzug.

The World Assembly,

Aware the nation of Zwangzug is a special nation, having positively impacted the NationStates Community in a variety of ways;

Recognizing the incredible prowess of the athletes of Zwangzug in baseball, and the associated nations of Aguazul and Earent in soccer, and Plutoni in hockey, accounting for multiple world championships in multiple sports on the world stage, most impressively Aguazul's four World Cup wins including an as of yet unmatched three in a row;

Feeling that exceeding the above nations' talent in athletics is the talent in sports journalism, which is famous among the NationStates Community not only for reporting of the athletics on the field, but also using the lens of athletics to illustrate national culture, provide humor, interweave international affairs, and even incorporate mathematical theory;

Appreciating the efforts to further international athletics via hosting a multitude of sporting events, including the World Baseball Classic 3, the '12 FairPlay Trophy, the 12 and '13 NationStates World Fair Sports Tournament, the '13 TriWrathlon (which included "Blood-Curdling Hurdles", "Raging Barricades", and "Great Weights"), and the World Cup of Hockey 16;

Further appreciating the Zwangzug's assistance given to other nation's hosting efforts by prolifiating information of basic pratices for score keeping;

Admiring that, despite the World Cup 54 mid-tournament murder by dinosaurs of Aguazul's emblematic General, Carlos Lopez, the nation was still able to co-host World Cup 55;

Praising Zwangzug's commitment to civil rights and equality as demonstrated by assisting in the organization of a men's rights group in Cassadaigua;

Noting Zwangzug's invaluable planning and logistics provided to both the World Baseball Classic and the NationStates World Fair;

Astounded that Zwangzug is also an accomplished defender, demonstrated by achieving the rank of Lieutenant in the United Defenders League, being awarded Liberator of the Month in March 2012, participating in such notable liberations as ITALIA, Norway, Corporate Profit Alliance, Liberal Haven, Hong Kong, Christmas, Roman Empire, Italy, Pirates, Space, and The Islamic Republic of Iran, as well as foiling countless other invasions before they happened via their spotting activities;

Awestruck that in addition to these accomplishments Zwangzug is also a talented issue advocate, bringing the following issues to world leaders' attention:

• Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
• Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
• National censuses via Your Nation Taking Leave Of Its Census;

Believing strongly that a nation that has made such positive contributions in so many different areas of the multiverse deserves international recognition;

Hereby commends Zwangzug.

Changes from 1st to 2nd draft: A couple grammatical and flow alterations, added the "Further Appreciating" clause at Kaboomlandia's suggestion (based on this), removed the "Believing" clause, fixed the name of the "NationStates World Fair", thanks to Uni's suggestion.

The World Assembly,

Aware the nation of Zwangzug is a special nation, having positively impacted the NationStates Community in a variety of ways;

Recognizing the incredible prowess of the athletes of Zwangzug in baseball, and the associated nations of Aguazul and Earent in soccer, and Plutoni in hockey, accounting for multiple world championships in multiple sports on the world stage, most impressively Aguazul's four World Cup wins including an as of yet unmatched three in a row;

Feeling that exceeding the above nations' talent in athletics is the talent in sports journalism, which is famous among the NationStates Community not only for reporting of the athletics on the field, but also using the lens of athletics to illustrate national culture, provide humor, interweave international affairs, and even incorporate mathematical theory;

Appreciating the efforts to further international athletics via hosting a multitude of sporting events, including the World Baseball Classic 3, the '12 FairPlay Trophy, the World's Fair Sports Tournament of the '12 and '13, the '13 TriWrathlon (which included "Blood-Curdling Hurdles", "Raging Barricades", and "Great Weights"), and the World Cup of Hockey 16;

Admiring that, despite the mid-tournament murder by dinosaurs of Aguazul's emblematic General, Carlos Lopez, in World Cup 54, the nation was still able to co-host World Cup 55;

Praising Zwangzug's commitment to civil rights and equality as demonstrated by assisting in the organization of a men's rights group in Cassadaigua;

Noting Zwangzug's invaluable planning and logistics provided to both the World Baseball Classic and the World's Fair;

Astounded that Zwangzug is also an accomplished defender, demonstrated by achieving the rank of Lieutenant in the United Defenders League, awarded Liberator of the Month in March 2012, participating in such notable liberations as ITALIA, Norway, Corporate Profit Alliance, Liberal Haven, Hong Kong, Christmas, Roman Empire, Italy, Pirates, Space, and The Islamic Republic of Iran, as well as foiling countless other invasions before they happened via their spotting activities;

Awestruck that in addition to these accomplishments Zwangzug is also a talented issue advocate, bringing the following issues to world leaders' attention:

Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
National censuses via Your Nation Taking Leave Of Its Census;
Valuing the wit and skilled writing that unites the advocacy of each issue;

Believing strongly that a nation that has made such positive contributions in so many different areas of the multiverse deserves international recognition;

Hereby commends Zwangzug.

Also, special thanks to all the Sports RP people that helped me understand their world (a bit) including Astograth, Audioslavia, Cassadaigua, and Newmanistan.

[Marilyn Manson Freaks]

I hope this passes! It's pretty good.

[Cheeksam]

A few notes/questions:

1. Getting the balance between RP stuff and Zwangzug's other achievements right is very important to me. In particular, I wanted to have at least a couple examples of Zwangzug's sports RP, but I didn't want to go overboard. Let me know what you think, I could definitely add more.
2. The praising clause is in reference to Cassadaigua telling me via TG that the idea for a men's right movement in Cassa was first inspired by something Zwangzug RPed. I don't think he RP was literal promoting of the men's right movement but RPing it Casa ran with the idea. I'd be interested to hear whether you guys think this clause is appropriate. I will TG Cassa to make sure they are okay with it as well.
3. I'm worried the list of liberated regions is too long... your thoughts?
4. Does the 'Valuing' clause add anything? Should it be cut?

Let me know if you have any other questions or comments!

The World Assembly,

Aware the nation of Zwangzug is a special nation, having positively impacted the NationStates Community in a variety of ways;

Recognizing the incredible prowess of the athletes of Zwangzug in baseball, and the associated nations of Aguazul and Earent in soccer, and Plutoni in hockey, accounting for multiple world championships in multiple sports on the world stage, most impressively Aguazul's four World Cup wins including an as of yet unmatched three in a row;

Feeling that exceeding the above nations' talent in athletics is the talent in sports journalism, which is famous among the NationStates Community not only for reporting of the athletics on the field, but also using the lens of athletics to illustrate national culture, provide humor, interweave international affairs, and even incorporate mathematical theory;

Appreciating the efforts to further international athletics via hosting a multitude of sporting events, including the World Baseball Classic 3, the '12 FairPlay Trophy, the World's Fair Sports Tournament of the '12 and '13, the '13 TriWrathlon (which included "Blood-Curdling Hurdles", "Raging Barricades", and "Great Weights"), and the World Cup of Hockey 16;

Admiring that, despite the mid-tournament murder by dinosaurs of Aguazul's emblematic General, Carlos Lopez, in World Cup 54, the nation was still able to co-host World Cup 55;

Praising Zwangzug's commitment to civil rights and equality as demonstrated by assisting in the organization of a men's rights group in Cassadaigua;

Noting Zwangzug's invaluable planning and logistics provided to both the World Baseball Classic and the World's Fair;

Astounded that Zwangzug is also an accomplished defender, demonstrated by achieving the rank of Lieutenant in the United Defenders League, awarded Liberator of the Month in March 2012, participating in such notable liberations as ITALIA, Norway, Corporate Profit Alliance, Liberal Haven, Hong Kong, Christmas, Roman Empire, Italy, Pirates, Space, and The Islamic Republic of Iran, as well as foiling countless other invasions before they happened via their spotting activities;

Awestruck that in addition to these accomplishments Zwangzug is also a talented issue advocate, bringing the following issues to world leaders' attention:

• Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
• Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
• National censuses via @@NAME@@ Taking Leave Of Its Census;

Valuing the wit and skilled writing that unites the advocacy of each issue;

Believing strongly that a nation that has made such positive contributions in so many different areas of the multiverse deserves international recognition;

Hereby commends Zwangzug.

I can't see anything wrong, but maybe its because I don't know anything about sports

[Willania Imperium]

I say it is well-crafted. The RP seems evenly balanced with the nation's R/D and Issue Accomplishments. It is cleverly written, well-based, and I find myself in support of it.

[Aclion]

Awestruck that in addition to these accomplishments Zwangzug is also a talented issue advocate, bringing the following issues to world leaders' attention:

Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
National censuses via @@NAME@@ Taking Leave Of Its Census;

Valuing the wit and skilled writing that unites the advocacy of each issue;

I see 4.(c) violations.

[Oresland]

Awestruck that in addition to these accomplishments Zwangzug is also a talented issue advocate, bringing the following issues to world leaders' attention:

Hate speech via Sticks And Stones;
Olympic boycotts via The Road To Blackacre Ends Here?; and
National censuses via @@NAME@@ Taking Leave Of Its Census;

Valuing the wit and skilled writing that unites the advocacy of each issue;

I see 4.(c) violations.

That's true. You can not commend nations for making issues. You should remove those lines. Otherwise, we would be supporting this commendation.

[Gnejs]

Similar phrases have been approved in the past.

[Kaboomlandia]

viewtopic.php?p=32300959#p32300959

Looks like the issue mentioning is legal for issues that were written before Zwangzug became an IE.

[Gnejs]

All the mentioned issues are legit; published well before Zwang joined the team. Which is why Ransium included them. He would know, he's an IE, after all.

[Aclion]

I see 4.(c) violations.

That's true. You can not commend nations for making issues. You should remove those lines. Otherwise, we would be supporting this commendation.

I'm more concerned with listing issues by title, but I suppose that's been done before without it being a problem.

[Ransium]

That's true. You can not commend nations for making issues. You should remove those lines. Otherwise, we would be supporting this commendation.

I'm more concerned with listing issues by title, but I suppose that's been done before without it being a problem.

See here: viewtopic.php?p=2248803&sid=3949e583e900f9d3264b4904674ff5cd#p2248803

[Aclion]

I'm more concerned with listing issues by title, but I suppose that's been done before without it being a problem.

See here: viewtopic.php?p=2248803&sid=3949e583e900f9d3264b4904674ff5cd#p2248803

Yeah I saw, though now I'm wondering about the @@NAME@@ tag.

[Ransium]

It has certainly been avoided in past condemnations and I agree it's dicey. I will think it over.

Edit: I've removed the tag, the meaning is still clear without it.

[Unibot III]

"NationStates World Fair" should be R4-compliant, so I would suggest it over World's Fair since it's the proper term.

Full support from me!

[Wrapper]

"NationStates World Fair" should be R4-compliant, so I would suggest it over World's Fair since it's the proper term.

I would agree, I don't see a legality issue with your proposed rewording.

[Bears Armed]

I'd certainly vote for this... even though Aguazul's first World Cup victory was achieved by beating the Bears' own team...
And thank you for reminding me about

the mid-tournament murder by dinosaurs of Aguazul's emblematic General

^_^

[Cassadaigua]

I'm not in the WA, but as I am mentioned in the draft, I want to declare my complete endorsement for this proposal. I don't think I would have gotten where I am today if not for her.

[Ransium]

Thanks for the comments/questions/feedback thus far. I've posted a new draft where I've tried to incorporate as much of it as possible. As always happy to hear more.

[Malsti]

Discussed this in the RMB I know, but some thoughts as to making it nice and unique, and taking into account Zwangzug.

1) Potentially starting one of the paragraphs with "In Passing" or "En Passant" to reference that particularly unique chess move that everyone forgets.

2) Closing with:

Believing strongly that unlike its namesake, Zwangzug leaves us with a winning move allowing us to recognize a nation that has made such positive contributions in so many different areas of the multiverse;

[Ransium]

Okay, I've peppered in a few chess puns and references throughout the newest draft, let me know if you think I've gotten too cute or forced.

[Fauxia]

I like it, but I'd cut off the dirt line, The resolution's a bit long anyway

[Cheeksam]

Okay, I've peppered in a few chess puns and references throughout the newest draft, let me know if you think I've gotten too cute or forced.

There were puns?

[States of Glory]

Most voters aren't going to check all these puns. Unless you remove them, the proposal is likely to reach a stalemate. Other than that, my mind is too board for my eyes to capture every single piece of this draft, so make your move.

I'll see myself out.

[Lord Dominator]

Most voters aren't going to check all these puns. Unless you remove them, the proposal is likely to reach a stalemate. Other than that, my mind is too board for my eyes to capture every single piece of this draft, so make your move.

I'll see myself out.

Great job there SoG
Full support for this Ransium, love all the chess puns