by Great Zurich » Mon May 12, 2014 2:21 pm
by Great Zurich » Mon May 12, 2014 2:24 pm
by SkyDip » Mon May 12, 2014 2:28 pm
REALIZING McM used to be Delegate,
NOTICING, by law of the North Pacific, one cannot hold three consecutive terms,
SEEING McM step down in accordance with the laws of the region,
Somehow Commends McM
Gordano and Lysandus wrote:SkyDip's actions have, ultimately, destroyed the World Assembly.
Eist wrote:Yea... If you are just going to casually dismiss SkyDip's advice, you are probably not going to get very far at all.
Sedgistan wrote:SkyDip is trying to help, and is giving sound advice. I'd suggestion listening to him, as he has experience of writing (and advising others with) legal proposals.
Frisbeeteria wrote:What Skydip said. This bitchfest is an embarrassment to the Security Council.
by Great Zurich » Mon May 12, 2014 2:36 pm
SkyDip wrote:Allow me to summarize:REALIZING McM used to be Delegate,
NOTICING, by law of the North Pacific, one cannot hold three consecutive terms,
SEEING McM step down in accordance with the laws of the region,
Somehow Commends McM
No. This is a bad draft that doesn't tell me anything about McM except that he was once Delegate of TNP.
by SkyDip » Mon May 12, 2014 2:39 pm
Great Zurich wrote:SkyDip wrote:Allow me to summarize:REALIZING McM used to be Delegate,
NOTICING, by law of the North Pacific, one cannot hold three consecutive terms,
SEEING McM step down in accordance with the laws of the region,
Somehow Commends McM
No. This is a bad draft that doesn't tell me anything about McM except that he was once Delegate of TNP.
What would you recommend? More info?
Gordano and Lysandus wrote:SkyDip's actions have, ultimately, destroyed the World Assembly.
Eist wrote:Yea... If you are just going to casually dismiss SkyDip's advice, you are probably not going to get very far at all.
Sedgistan wrote:SkyDip is trying to help, and is giving sound advice. I'd suggestion listening to him, as he has experience of writing (and advising others with) legal proposals.
Frisbeeteria wrote:What Skydip said. This bitchfest is an embarrassment to the Security Council.
by Abacathea » Mon May 12, 2014 3:06 pm
by SkyDip » Mon May 12, 2014 3:07 pm
Great Zurich wrote:Check out the newly edited draft
Gordano and Lysandus wrote:SkyDip's actions have, ultimately, destroyed the World Assembly.
Eist wrote:Yea... If you are just going to casually dismiss SkyDip's advice, you are probably not going to get very far at all.
Sedgistan wrote:SkyDip is trying to help, and is giving sound advice. I'd suggestion listening to him, as he has experience of writing (and advising others with) legal proposals.
Frisbeeteria wrote:What Skydip said. This bitchfest is an embarrassment to the Security Council.
by Ramaeus » Mon May 12, 2014 4:07 pm
by District XIV » Mon May 12, 2014 5:16 pm
Great Zurich wrote:Helping new nations out immensely
by Great Zurich » Mon May 12, 2014 6:25 pm
by Great Zurich » Mon May 12, 2014 6:27 pm
by Mousebumples » Mon May 12, 2014 7:22 pm
by Darwinish Brentsylvania » Mon May 12, 2014 7:31 pm
by Tatooene » Mon May 12, 2014 7:32 pm
by Ramaeus » Mon May 12, 2014 8:00 pm
Darwinish Brentsylvania wrote:I like McMasterdonia's achievements, I really do. But tell us something other than in TNP that they have done, because most commendations are given to nations that have affected the world. List some achievements outside of that feeder. Also, it's also kind of short as well. Try adding more things to the proposal, and maybe it'll work out.
by SkyDip » Tue May 13, 2014 6:19 am
Gordano and Lysandus wrote:SkyDip's actions have, ultimately, destroyed the World Assembly.
Eist wrote:Yea... If you are just going to casually dismiss SkyDip's advice, you are probably not going to get very far at all.
Sedgistan wrote:SkyDip is trying to help, and is giving sound advice. I'd suggestion listening to him, as he has experience of writing (and advising others with) legal proposals.
Frisbeeteria wrote:What Skydip said. This bitchfest is an embarrassment to the Security Council.
by North East Somerset » Tue May 13, 2014 8:13 am
Milograd wrote:People who continue to insist that players shouldn't be commended for regional work need to get off their high horses.
McM is a highly deserving candidate.
by SkyDip » Tue May 13, 2014 9:53 am
North East Somerset wrote:Milograd wrote:People who continue to insist that players shouldn't be commended for regional work need to get off their high horses.
McM is a highly deserving candidate.
Hear hear.
Too many people seem to think SC commendations are just for WA authors to pat themselves on the back.
Gordano and Lysandus wrote:SkyDip's actions have, ultimately, destroyed the World Assembly.
Eist wrote:Yea... If you are just going to casually dismiss SkyDip's advice, you are probably not going to get very far at all.
Sedgistan wrote:SkyDip is trying to help, and is giving sound advice. I'd suggestion listening to him, as he has experience of writing (and advising others with) legal proposals.
Frisbeeteria wrote:What Skydip said. This bitchfest is an embarrassment to the Security Council.
by Applebania » Tue May 13, 2014 10:31 am
Great Zurich wrote:The World Assembly,
RECOGNIZING thatThe Northern Lights ofThe nation tags in proposals give you the pretitle automatically. McMasterdonia as theformerLongest-serving and currently outgoing WA Delegate for The North Pacific,WISHING to recognize this nation for its contributions,Many would say this is fluff and unneeded. I would disagree, but it definitely could be better-written.
APPLAUDING the effort thatThe Northern Lights ofMcMasterdonia has taken to provide a positive environment for new and old nations alike, Elaborate more.
FURTHER NOTING that The Northern Lights of McMasterdonia hasextendedthe amount of activity in The North Pacific in several ways, such as:INCLUDING BUT NOT LIMITED TO:Changed.ProvidingAuthoring a humorous and informative regional newspaperProvidingAdministrating a quality forum
Securing The North Pacific from invadersand raidersThey're the same thing, so saying Invaders and Raiders is redundant.
Encouraging new nations to take part in regional government and other activities, Again, more elaboration is needed.
Don't say Providing twice. It gets repetitive.
Acknowledging [nation]McMasterdonia's[/nation] authorship of SC #129 Commend Eluvatar, which recognised a nation which had worked tirelessly to protect multiple regions from tyranny, Worth a mention, and it allays the whole "He never did anything outside of TNP!" thing.
Believing that McMasterdonia more than meets the criteria for a nation worthy of commendation,
Hereby commends The Northern Lights of McMasterdonia.
Has potential but very light on the content. I'd recommend talking to the Abacathean ambassador about this one: he's involved in the governance of TNP and is also an experienced SC writer.
by Hobbesistan » Tue May 13, 2014 6:53 pm
Applebania wrote:Great Zurich wrote:The World Assembly,
RECOGNIZING thatThe Northern Lights ofThe nation tags in proposals give you the pretitle automatically. McMasterdonia as theformerLongest-serving and currently outgoing WA Delegate for The North Pacific,WISHING to recognize this nation for its contributions,Many would say this is fluff and unneeded. I would disagree, but it definitely could be better-written.
APPLAUDING the effort thatThe Northern Lights ofMcMasterdonia has taken to provide a positive environment for new and old nations alike, Elaborate more.
FURTHER NOTING that The Northern Lights of McMasterdonia hasextendedthe amount of activity in The North Pacific in several ways, such as:INCLUDING BUT NOT LIMITED TO:Changed.ProvidingAuthoring a humorous and informative regional newspaperProvidingAdministrating a quality forum
Securing The North Pacific from invadersand raidersThey're the same thing, so saying Invaders and Raiders is redundant.
Encouraging new nations to take part in regional government and other activities, Again, more elaboration is needed.
Don't say Providing twice. It gets repetitive.
Acknowledging [nation]McMasterdonia's[/nation] authorship of SC #129 Commend Eluvatar, which recognised a nation which had worked tirelessly to protect multiple regions from tyranny, Worth a mention, and it allays the whole "He never did anything outside of TNP!" thing.
Believing that McMasterdonia more than meets the criteria for a nation worthy of commendation,
Hereby commends The Northern Lights of McMasterdonia.
Has potential but very light on the content. I'd recommend talking to the Abacathean ambassador about this one: he's involved in the governance of TNP and is also an experienced SC writer.
The newest Applebanian ambassador takes his seat in the SC. He was an Avia, a humanoid with wings on their back, much like an angel. He was rather shy, like a child going to a new school, however Joshua and Claire were busy in the GA, so a ambassador was needed for SC affairs. He sighed, and took out his pens.
"Red is complaints/suggestions, blue is additions, Green is things that are good. I've crossed out things that should go, as well."
OOC: TBH, I don't really know that much about McMasterdonia's achievements, as I'm entirely uninvolved in TNP.
(OOC: I, TBH, don't know that much
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