The Dark Star Republic wrote:"I'm arguing for less text, not more:UNDERSTANDING that many who desire children are not necessarily able to procreate and that adoption may be their last resort,
"Don't see why you need to acknowledge this at all: it is privileging one reason for adoption above others.
BELIEVING that intercountry adoption can be beneficial to individuals who wish to adopt children and to nations experiencing difficulty with their internal rate of adoption,
"Opens up the meaning without changing the sense of the overall line."
~ Inky Fungschlammer
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I will take it under advisement, but I like to write in a flowerly style. I don't believe this is an issue, especially considering it's the preamble, and forgive me for not pandering to someone who isn't even a voting member of this body.