Faliksa straightened herself in her chair. "Alright lets get to work on this."
Observing that there is no uniform set of rules governing freedom of press in World Assembly member nations;
"While that may be true, the question should be is this preambulatory clause really necessary? While that may be a true observation, we think that this sentence might set Sovereigntist governments against this proposal from the start.
"Why is that? Because it is observing that X is not a universal set of rules. The very first question they will ask is 'Does there need to be a universal set of rules?'. Many will answer no. We would suggest that clause be stricken in its entirety as its just opening up this proposal for cases to be made against it.
Taking into account the fact that most nations have their own news media organisations which are allowed different levels of freedom in reporting daily news from inside and outside their borders;
"No problem with this clause.
Believing that all citizens of World Assembly member nations have a right to expand their knowledge and be educated about affairs in their own nation along with world affairs;
"We suppose it is okay...but we can see arguments being made against this for classified information, and propaganda efforts being launched against a nation's government. While this may be considered a right by many nations--other nations which do have an official state ideology are more likely to want to limit mass communication (Or propaganda) that runs counter to the official state ideology. For example a fascist nation would oppose unfettered access to communist propaganda and vise versa.
"Furthermore the line between news about, and education about foreign affairs and national affairs and propaganda is nonexistent. Every news report produced has a bias of some sort, indeed it has to because it is created by a sapient being--which being sapient has her own political and cultural biases.
"Perhapes rewording it as follows would help:
Believing that all citizens of World Assembly member nations have a right should have the opportunity to expand their knowledge and be educated about affairs in their own nation along with world international affairs;
"I included a change in the word 'world' to 'international' because some nations might argue that by 'world' the proposal means Terra and does not apply to any other celestial body that they might occupy.
Defining a media technology to be any technology used for mass communication of information (including the Internet, television, newspapers, and radio);
"This is okay...but some small changes it could be better. The rewording should look like this.
Defining a media technology to be any technology used for mass communication of information, including but not limited to the Internet, television, newspapers, and radio);
"The reasoning behind those changes is as follows. First the enclosed description was unnecessary, most people know what mass communication means in a late industrial society. However, for societies that are more advanced than that they may not use television, radios, newspapers or even an internet. Monkiah for example uses planetary intranets (yes they are plural as we occupy more than one celestial body) where as communication between planets, moons satellites uses subspace frequencies to transmit information at a speed faster than light. If it was left as it was, one could argue that this only applied to internet(s), television, radio and newspapers.
Further defining news media to be those elements of the mass media that focus on delivering news to the general public through various media technologies;
"This definition is just plain bad. News itself isn't defined. I'm not sure that it should since most delegations here have a reasonable understanding of what news is. However, news can also be used and is often used as a means of propaganda. As such, one need merely call any foreign news source 'propaganda' to exempt it.
"The clause should read as follows:
Further defining news media to be those elements of the mass media that focus on delivering newsobjectively true information to the general public through various media technologies;
"By wording it in this way the resolution defines news by default as 'objectively true information', and the reasonable nation theory would suggest that it would ultimately be interpreted as 'objectively true information of recent discovery/origin'.
Further defining a news media organisation to be a self-sustained or government funded body that deals in delivering news to the general public through various media technologies;
"Provided the changes I've suggested to the previous clause has been incorporated into the draft proposal, this clause is redundant. It would be self-evident that any organization which uses news media for the purpose of delivering news to the general public would be a news media organization.
Requests all World Assembly member nations to begin following the guidelines below to ensure a fair and free press
"Requests, suggests that the following operative clauses are optional. We would suggest changing it, the word requests, to 'Calls upon'.
Section I - National News Media
1) Nations will allow national news media organisations to freely report news from and to areas inside their own borders.
2) Citizens will not be restricted access to any national news media sources from media technologies which are available in the nation.
"These are fine as they are.
3) Nations will not interfere with or restrict reports from news media organisations in accordance with Resolution 30: Freedom of Expression.
"If Resolution 30 were to be repealed, as unlikely as that is, this clause would be rendered inoperable. Not to mention there are often very good reasons to restrict reports in the news, for example a report about the status of the military could contain classified information. We suggest the following changes.
3) Nations will not interfere with or restrict reports from news media organisations, except in cases where national security may be threatened by the free report of the information;in accordance with Resolution 30: Freedom of Expression.
4) National news media organisations will be free to report international news without censorship.
Section II - International News Media
5) Citizens will not be restricted access to any international news media sources from media technologies which are available in the nation.
6) Nations will open their borders to all reporters from international news media organisations.
Section III - Reporter Legality & Access
7) Reporters will be recognised as such if they are officially employed by a news media organisation in at least one WA nation.
8 ) Nations reserve the right to restrict reporter access to areas where allowing it would pose a genuine threat to national security.
"Looks good to me for now.
Section IV - Addendum
9) Nations are otherwise free to control the availability of all media technologies as they see fit.
"The word 'clarifies' should be inserted before the word 'nations' in the final clause."