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The Security Council,

Noting Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002 by The Bruce, making it one of the oldest regions in the world,

Acknowledging in 2003 the Wysterian Relief and Resettlement Project (WRRP) was introduced. The Wysterian Relief and Resettlement Project was a mission to help keep nations active before Lazarus was founded. This further expanded to help protect the activity of nations from the Land of the Lions, the National Hockey League, Alliance of Democratic Nations, and many smaller regions; which came to Wysteria as cohesive groups,

Recognizing Wysteria has maintained an active presence in numerous inter-regional summits, held to discuss the future of the world and standing up for the sovereignty of regions. Such as:
[*]Founders summit 2004
[*]NationStates World Assembly summit 2007
[*]Neutral Territory summit 2008
[*]NS Forum Survey summit 2009

Applauds the Delegates, past and present, for doing an outstanding job on maintaining dedication to World Assembly,

Observing that Wysteria is home to nations which achieve #1 in the world on the World Census reports such as, Complete Bastards, Nak nak, Isle of hags, and The Grendels. These nations have achieved #1 in reports such as, Largest Automobile Manufacturing Sector, Largest Agricultural Sector, Largest Cheese Export Sector, Largest Book Publishing Sector, Fastest Growing Economies, Most Subsidized Industry, and Lowest Unemployment Rates,

Also Acknowledging: Sketch, for being the first nation to bring Wysteria into the spotlight by climbing to the top of the world census reports, and again The Grendels for keeping track of marketing reports since 2005. Marketing Reports consisted of the top 30 nations of Wysteria, which show the current rank and also how much the nations have risen or fallen since the last census report of the same market,

Admiring that with very little promotion of the region Wysteria has maintained a very active and large community for over eight years,

Hereby Commends the region Wysteria for the appraisals mentioned above.

Going Postal wrote:

The Security Council,

Noting, Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002.

Acknowledging, a fair amount of the original “Billionaires Club” are still strong and active.

Realizing, Wysteria has become a refuge for older nations who have lost their regions in invasions.

Applauding, on any Economic WA Census, Wysteria claims multiple nations in the Worlds Top 10, supporting the global economy.

Impressed, without regional recruiting Wysteria has thrived into an extremely powerful region.

Understanding, Wysteria has made a positive impact on the world for over 8 years.

The World Assembly hereby Commends Wysteria for its outstanding achievements.

Advice? Did I miss something? Tips? Grammar? Spelling? All help will be noted.

Commas are superfluous. Explain some of the positive impact. Until then- ABSTAIN.

Corporation de Apple wrote:Commas are superfluous. Explain some of the positive impact. Until then- ABSTAIN.

I revised commas and explained plus a little rewording to sound better.

Going Postal wrote: Noting Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002.

Um...good to know. Might want to state that Wysteria is one of the oldest UCR's.

Acknowledging a fair amount of the original “Billionaires Club” are still strong and active.

What is this "club"?

Realizing Wysteria has become a refuge for older nations who have lost their regions in invasions.

So have other regions. Like the Rejected Realms.

Applauding on any Economic World Assembly Census Wysteria houses multiple nations in the Worlds Top 10.

Yeah, thats important. But is it ONLY economic ones?

Impressed that without regional recruiting Wysteria has thrived into an extremely powerful region.

I highly doubt that there has been no recruiting.

Understanding Wysteria has made a positive impact on the world for over 8 years by being one of the biggest supporters to the global economy.

Er... what? What global economy?

So, i'm not opposed to a Commendation of Wysteria, but i'd be opposed to this one.

Going Postal wrote:Acknowledging a fair amount of the original “Billionaires Club” are still strong and active.

If I've never heard of it -- I suspect many haven't heard of it ... what is it?

Realizing Wysteria has become a refuge for older nations who have lost their regions in invasions.

What, they don't accept newer nations?
Give me some examples of Wysteria as a refugee camp.

Applauding on any Economic World Assembly Census Wysteria houses multiple nations in the Worlds Top 10.

Bring in some current examples. Explain why this is a contribution to NS.

Impressed that without regional recruiting Wysteria has thrived into an extremely powerful region.

Because it dominates the Top 10, perhaps? Achievements are less substantial in a commendation over contributions. Don't rely heavily on these sorts of evidence for a commendation.

Understanding Wysteria has made a positive impact on the world for over 8 years by being one of the biggest supporters to the global economy.

Alright, there's an argument, I suppose. Perhaps. But does their wealth trickle down?

The Original Billionaires club was made up by nations back when there was very few nations that broke 1 billion population. Of course you guys don't know about it, considering you weren't around. Anyway, I will get to fixing for an update.

Going Postal wrote:The Original Billionaires club was made up by nations back when there was very few nations that broke 1 billion population.

Ah, that makes sense. Thanks.

Unibot II wrote:

Going Postal wrote:The Original Billionaires club was made up by nations back when there was very few nations that broke 1 billion population.

Ah, that makes sense. Thanks.

*nods* Many older regions (including both Texas and Monkey Island) had "Billionaires Clubs" - with a new threshold of attainment being reached with each subsequent billion being reached. I think the MI Billionaires Club lasted until about when we had nations hitting 8 billion. But, after awhile, it seemed like there were 50+ nations in the Billionaire club (i.e. about half the region at that time), so it wasn't nearly as exclusive as it once was.

Ok I know it's been a while, been a little busy moving to my new place.... but I revised most of it:

The Security Council,

Noting Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002 by The Bruce, making it one of the oldest player created regions in the world.

Acknowledging in 2003 the WRRP (Wysterian Relief and Resettlement Project) was introduced. The Wysterian Relief and Resettlement Project was a mission to help keep nations alive before Lazarus was founded. This further expanded into accepting refugee nations from regions undergoing anything from invasions, inactivity, or civil war.

Recognizing Wysteria has maintained an active presence in numerous inter-regional summits, held to discuss the future of the world and standing up for the sovereignty of regions. Such as:
[*]Founders summit 2004
[*]NationStates World Assembly summit 2007
[*]Neutral Territory summit 2008
[*]NS Forum Survey summit 2009

Applauds the Delegates, past and present, for doing an outstanding job on maintaining dedication to World Assembly, including Quintessence of Dust who has submitted and passed eight United Nations resolutions and three World Assembly resolutions.

Impressed that Wysteria is home to nations who achieve #1 in the world on the World Assembly Census reports such as, Complete Bastards, nak nak, isle of hags, and the grendels.

Also Notable Nations: Sketch, for being the first nation to bring Wysteria into the spotlight by climbing to the top of the world census reports, and again the grendels for keeping track of marketing reports since 2005.

Admiring that with very little regional advertisement Wysteria has maintained a very active and large community for over eight years.

Hereby Commends the region Wysteria for the appraisals mentioned above.

A mention that on multiple census report Wysteria is in the top 10 regions, alongside regions multiple times it's size?

E.g. Today for basket weaving. Wyteria at 250 nations is beside the feeders at 5000nations.

You may want to check your proposal for Rule 4 violations. This for example:

Noting Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002 by The Bruce, making it one of the oldest player created regions in the world.

Crazy girl wrote:You may want to check your proposal for Rule 4 violations. This for example:

Noting Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002 by The Bruce, making it one of the oldest player created regions in the world.

Fixed.

Warzone Codger wrote:A mention that on multiple census report Wysteria is in the top 10 regions, alongside regions multiple times it's size?

E.g. Today for basket weaving. Wyteria at 250 nations is beside the feeders at 5000nations.

1. The Pacific 4,878 The Radical Delegate of Krulltopia
2. Wysteria 256 The Tiger blood and Adonis DNA of Hydroponic Nation
3. The North Pacific 5,003 The Fairly Well-Liked Dominion of Blackshear41
4. Lazarus 5,841 The Reminiscing Sheep of Drop Your Pants
5. Capitalist Paradise 358 The Free Republic of Afforess
6. The South Pacific 5,103 The Smoking Gun of Southern Bellz
7. The East Pacific 5,057 The People's Delegate of Todd McCloud
8. The West Pacific 5,130 The Afro Essence of Punk Reloaded
9. Europe 653 The United States of Alsted
10. The Alliance of Dictators 170 The United Socialist States of Vorograd

I don't think that would be wise to put in the proposal because some ranks regions with 1 nation are #1 in the world. And would add an easy excuse for other commends.

Going Postal wrote:Noting Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002 by The Bruce, making it one of the oldest nation created regions in the world.

"Nation founded" would probably sound better.

The Wysterian Relief and Resettlement Project was a mission to help keep nations alive before Lazarus was founded.

'Alive'... kind of suggests personhood. I'm sure there's another word you could use which would be more appropriate for nation-simulation language.

...including Quintessence of Dust who has submitted...

That should be "which has".

Admiring that with very little regional advertisement Wysteria has maintained a very active and large community for over eight years.

"Regional promotion" or "promotion of the region" would sound better.

Quod wouldn't want to be featured in this proposal anyway. Wysteria had nothing to do with his legislative achievements, and he despises the Security Council.

It's just World Census, by the way; the WA has nothing to do with it (anymore).

Omigodtheykilledkenny wrote:Quod wouldn't want to be featured in this proposal anyway. Wysteria had nothing to do with his legislative achievements, and he despises the Security Council.

It's just World Census, by the way; the WA has nothing to do with it (anymore).

It's not his choice? Understandable if it was a Commend on his nation, but he helped make Wysteria great.

And Sedg, I fixed everything. So would this be ready to fly?

Couple more problems:

This further expanded to help save many active nations from the Land of the Lions, the National Hockey League, Alliance of Democratic Nations, and many smaller regions; who came to Wysteria as cohesive groups.

Impressed that Wysteria is home to nations who achieve #1 in the world on the World Census reports such as, Complete Bastards, Nak nak, Isle of hags, and The Grendels.

Those should be 'which'.

Sedgistan wrote:Couple more problems:

This further expanded to help save many active nations from the Land of the Lions, the National Hockey League, Alliance of Democratic Nations, and many smaller regions; who came to Wysteria as cohesive groups.

Impressed that Wysteria is home to nations who achieve #1 in the world on the World Census reports such as, Complete Bastards, Nak nak, Isle of hags, and The Grendels.

Those should be 'which'.

Wow, I didn't even realize I had that many whos. Incredible. Thanks for the pointers Sedg, any last pointers before I put this proposal up?

I can't see any further legality issues (though that's not a guarantee there aren't any ). I would recommend waiting another day or two to see if there's any further feedback on content/phrasing from other SCers, but that's your call.

Going Postal wrote:Noting Wysteria was founded on December 21st, 2002 by The Bruce, making it one of the oldest nation founded regions in the world.

Strange wording.. dammit UCR won't fly... technically Wysteria is one of the oldest regions altogether, 'cause the feeders were mostly nation-created too.

Applauds the Delegates, past and present, for doing an outstanding job on maintaining dedication to World Assembly, including Quintessence of Dust which has submitted and passed eight United Nations resolutions and three World Assembly resolutions.

Quality not Quantity -- and you'll find if you take the time to explain the great things that Quod's resolutions have done, you'll end up just focusing the resolution on what really should go in a commendation for Quod if he would sanction such a resolution.

Impressed that Wysteria is home to nations which achieve #1 in the world on the World Census reports such as, Complete Bastards, Nak nak, Isle of hags, and The Grendels.

The World Assembly shouldn't be impressed at #1s on all the Census Reports... some of them aren't exactly things you should be proud of. . Name some specific census reports.

Admiring that with very little promotion of the region Wysteria has maintained a very active and large community for over eight years.

It's members are in the census at the top, everyday -- this is a secondary achievement, an achievement that is facilitated by another achievement (e.g., getting to the top of a census).. it makes the argument weaker and circular.

There is no longer any need to mention me in text.

Uni, do you have MSN or some sort of messenger, where we can discuss the proposal? If so please telegram me.

Contra to this proposal I feel that Wysteria should be condemned for being very very hard to prune.

Flemingovia wrote:Contra to this proposal I feel that Wysteria should be condemned for being very very hard to prune.

Could you explain this a little better? I am not sure what you mean.