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by Pythaga
Tue Aug 11, 2020 11:26 am
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] Watch your language, young man!
Replies: 11
Views: 265

You'll probably want a has computers validity on option 4 as well.

I think the second and third effect lines are pretty good, but I'd recommend changing out the effects for options 1 and 4. Unfortunately I really can't come up with any ideas to help you.
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 11, 2020 11:10 am
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [Draft] Feeling Pins and Needles
Replies: 5
Views: 201

Start by having CCTVs at every point of the supply chain. Ensure that every farm and distribution centre has an airport security-style machine to scan for metallic objects. I'd suggest replacing "CCTVs" with either "CCTV cameras" or "monitoring cameras" or something el...
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 11, 2020 10:51 am
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] Deli Worship
Replies: 11
Views: 325

a blood sacrifice must be made to a higher power; that sacrifice being you. The "that sacrifice being you" part is a little unclear and confusing in my opinion, I'd recommend a change to "and you are on the chopping block" or something in that vein so it's more clear at first gl...
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 11, 2020 9:50 am
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: The Pentuple Contest: Anything-But-Pandemics
Replies: 221
Views: 14670

Great job Electrum!!!
by Pythaga
Sun Aug 09, 2020 8:11 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] Local Ordnance
Replies: 3
Views: 165

Police using military equipment has already been the focus of an issue: #455 . We'll become an international laughingstock if this continues much longer. We need to aggressively slash the military budget, and make it clear that they are to use equipment until it breaks! I don't think a nation spendi...
by Pythaga
Wed Aug 05, 2020 9:50 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED] Fish Out Of Water
Replies: 37
Views: 1062

The draft looks good to me! Thamks! Yeah, I was wondering if it would make sense to add another option to the issue, though right now I'm eh on that right now. I personally don’t think you need another option. I think anything you add will end up being one of the overused tropes and won’t contribut...
by Pythaga
Wed Aug 05, 2020 9:31 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED] A Friend With Weed Is A Friend Indeed?
Replies: 33
Views: 851

Westinor wrote:Er, came up with a new effect line for Op2 - I don't know if it exactly makes sense? Hopefully it's better?


It doesn’t really make sense to me, but it could very well be an obvious pop-culture reference I’m missing.
by Pythaga
Wed Aug 05, 2020 9:28 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED] Fish Out Of Water
Replies: 37
Views: 1062

Westinor wrote:The draft; has been updaetd as (hopefully] not to include any more egregious grammer mistakes!

Those unmatched parenthesis will haunt me for a very long time. Some people really want to watch the world burn :twisted:


The draft looks good to me!
by Pythaga
Wed Aug 05, 2020 7:47 am
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] A Towering Dilemma
Replies: 18
Views: 413

Cell coverage in US national parks has only been a thing for a few years now, but very little has been implemented so far and it is still very hotly debated. Working on a second draft to address CWA's suggestions. Ha. So what did residents of nagional parks do? In the US no one except maybe a few p...
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 04, 2020 10:03 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED]The Phony Lisa
Replies: 29
Views: 608

@@NAME@@ should be replaced with @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@. It should be @@NAME@@, no? It's currently being referred to as the Intelligence Agency, not the "IA". What sounds more normal, “The Germany Intelligence Agency” or “The German Intelligence Agency”? I personally think the latter makes ...
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 04, 2020 4:14 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED] Fish Out Of Water
Replies: 37
Views: 1062

The plans have met significant opposition from farmers and local fishermen, who claim the proposed farms will sink their prospective industries. I believe this should be respective industries as opposed to prospective. Also, mentioning farmers in the description seems kind of disjointed as it isn't...
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 04, 2020 4:09 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED]The Phony Lisa
Replies: 29
Views: 608

The @@NAME@@ Intelligence Agency @@NAME@@ should be replaced with @@DEMONYMADJECTIVE@@. We live in a society where old artwork is given priority over contemporary work, despite contemporary pieces being soooo much deeper than the old stuff, plus, you can't counterfeit something that is brand spanki...
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 04, 2020 3:49 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] A Towering Dilemma
Replies: 18
Views: 413

Option one ‘Now, let us’ reads better than ‘Now let us’ Changed. I've rewritten option 3 to hopefully address Westinor's suggestions. I think the new version needs some work, so I'd appreciate some suggestions. Also, I'm not certain that the effect line works well for that one either, let me know w...
by Pythaga
Tue Aug 04, 2020 3:27 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] A Towering Dilemma
Replies: 18
Views: 413

I believe "blazingly fast internet" would sound better. Calling something, especially internet, blazing fast is a relatively common thing. I'll leave it as is. Consider changing this to "With your permission - and a government grant or two - we can have everyone connected in no time&...
by Pythaga
Thu Jul 30, 2020 2:43 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] A Towering Dilemma
Replies: 18
Views: 413

Draft 2 posted. So trim this by 50%, and then add a mention that cell towers could be disguised to fit in with their surroundings (as that's what happens in real life). You could also do a doppelganger option here for nations with no internet, instead focusing on being able to make phone calls. You ...
by Pythaga
Thu Jul 30, 2020 1:47 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] The Best Worst Film Ever
Replies: 13
Views: 449

A couple grammar fixes for you: should be instead the showcase I think this is supposed to be "should instead be the showcase" replies in a condescending tone the infamous avant-garde director of the film, @@ANIMAL@@ @@RANDOMLASTNAME@@. This sounds really off, "replies @@ANIMAL@@ @@RA...
by Pythaga
Tue Jul 28, 2020 5:38 pm
 
Forum: Arts & Fiction
Topic: What is the last movie you've seen? Part 2
Replies: 4296
Views: 166409

Just saw Borat the other night. Incredibly funny, but also as far from PC as is imaginable.
by Pythaga
Tue Jul 28, 2020 5:34 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [Last call?] Cheque, Mate
Replies: 34
Views: 1226

I have a couple grammar fixes for you: We have operated our own tournament matters for decades, The word matters doesn't really fit here, I'd suggest replacing it with independently. says @@RANDOMNAME@@, placed last on several chess tournaments. This should be "says @@RANDOMNAME@@, who placed l...
by Pythaga
Mon Jul 27, 2020 1:09 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED] A Royal Choice
Replies: 27
Views: 592

raised the topic of @@NAME@@ becoming an elective monarchy, in yet another spiel to improve his chances at the throne. I don't think that spiel really fits here, as it isn't the rant itself that improves his chances, but the idea behind it. I would recommend replacing it with either bid, gambit, or...
by Pythaga
Mon Jul 27, 2020 12:57 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [SUBMITTED] Free The Rainbow Or Rainbow-Free?
Replies: 50
Views: 1074

Description wrote:Recently, the @@CAPITAL@@'s city council publicly declared their support


You either need to remove the 'the' before @@CAPITAL@@ or the 's' from the end of it here.
by Pythaga
Mon Jul 27, 2020 12:51 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [LAST CALL] Where Security Lies
Replies: 15
Views: 698

Australian rePublic wrote:What's a minister of the interior?


In some countries a ministry that deals with law enforcement, immigration, and other similar internal affair. See here.
by Pythaga
Mon Jul 27, 2020 12:47 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] A Towering Dilemma
Replies: 18
Views: 413

Wait? No mobile coverage in national parks? Is that actually a thing? All the national parks in Australia that I've been to have perfect phone coverage Cell coverage in US national parks has only been a thing for a few years now, but very little has been implemented so far and it is still very hotl...
by Pythaga
Sat Jul 25, 2020 2:36 pm
 
Forum: Technical
Topic: Technical
Replies: 4
Views: 191

You can go to the mobile site directly by entering m.nationstates.net as opposed to just nationstates.net
by Pythaga
Sat Jul 25, 2020 12:45 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] An Unwelcome Distraction
Replies: 8
Views: 247

I really like this one, good job!

The only real problem that I can find with it is that Daguo should be Dàguó in option 1.
by Pythaga
Fri Jul 24, 2020 2:14 pm
 
Forum: Got Issues?
Topic: [DRAFT] A Towering Dilemma
Replies: 18
Views: 413

I've changed the validity so that #706.1 is a prerequisite rather than this being a direct followup. I've also slightly reworded option 4 so that it is only creating the emergency network in national parks, not nationwide. I would appreciate it if an editor could comment on the validity as per what ...
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