IC: While I applaud the Ambassador for their efforts, we have no doubt this proposal will fail when submitted. This is not due to bad writing but to the fact that the proposal holds an unpopular opinion.
OOC: Yeah, it's doomed if that clause stays. Whether or not the 3% figure is true or not is irrevelent as proving it is a RL violation, as the clause itself may be. Remove it, and the chance of success increases.
Otherwise, meh, it's getting better..