[Draft] Condemn Psychotic Dictatorship

[Ottoman Nogay]

World Assembly,

Understanding the important role of the Security Council of this in terms of creating peace,

We are confident that the Psychotic Dictatorship rob undermine communities and destroy people's rights

Psychotic Dictatorship is surprised that the area did not recognize the rights of people and countries in the region confined, such as:

- IF YOU ARE INACTIVE 20 DAYS, YOU'RE OUT! LEAVE THE REGION AND YOU'RE BANNED !, it is less restrictive regulations and create many countries disenfranchised.
- EMBASSY ALL REQUESTS WILL BE REJECTED BECAUSE WE DO NOT DEAL WITH REGIONS inferior - THAT MEANS YOU, IDIOT !, this rule makes the delegation Ambassador insulted and could lead to war.
- * NO DEMOCRACY, NO FREEDOM *, * NO MERCY, * NO WA peons, * ONLY Tyranny. This regulation does not favor the countries in the region and create a right of free speech is prohibited.


Horrified by the fact that the Psychotic Dictatorship so cruel in the regulations, and we would like to ask a few requirements:
1. Psychotic Dictatorship must change the rules that were in World Factbook Entry and the Psychotic Dictatorship asked to suspend regional activity. if these regulations adhered to the second point will not do so in the freezing area and when the third point is executed the area you will be frozen.

2. Closing the area with immediate and unconditional liberation of all prisoners in the local area Psychotic Dictatorship, as well as countries in the region will be evacuated to the Regional Europeia.

3. We will provide the opportunity for Psychotic Dictatorship leaders to change the rules with a time of 20 hari.Maka power Psychotic Dictatorship in these countries will be refunded according to the limits of the Agreement have been determined (this relates to the second point third point if violated, will be enacted the second point).

Noting that the Democratic Psychotic violated protocol has been involved in regional security, which has been clearly defined as illegal by the regulatory authorities of various global,

realizing too many rules infringed assembly world to be listed on this resolution,

Condemning the Democratic Psychotic.

[We Are Not the NSA]

I'm on mobile, so I can't give full analysis yet. What I do want to establish now though, and I'm asking this as a legitimate question, is whether or not English is your first language?

[Bhang Bhang Duc]

I'm likewise on my mobile, but a quick look through your proposal reveals that 75% of it is fluff. All the paragraphs relating to want you want Psychotic Dictatorship to do is wasted - the SC can only Condemn, Commend or Liberate.

The SC cannot force a nation or a region to change its behaviour. If you want to Condemn this nation then this proposal will need a lot of rewriting.

[Wrapper]

I believe your target is Psychotic Dictatorships, and not Psychotic Dictatorship, correct?

You also need to get rid of the "we" everywhere. Proposals need to be written from the point of view of the Security Council, not the point of view of the author. For more information on this and other SC proposal rules, please refer to the rules here.

[Ohioan Territory]

The end says, "Condemning the Democratic Psychotic," is this a typo?

[We Are Not the NSA]

The World Assembly,

Understanding the important role of the Security Council of this in terms of creating peace,

We are confident that the Psychotic Dictatorship robs, undermine's communities and destroys people's rights,

Psychotic Dictatorship is Surprised that the region violates the rights of people and countries confined in the region, having laws such as:

- IF YOU ARE INACTIVE 20 DAYS, YOU'RE OUT! LEAVE THE REGION AND YOU'RE BANNED !: it is less restrictive regulations and create many countries disenfranchised.
- EMBASSY ALL REQUESTS WILL BE REJECTED BECAUSE WE DO NOT DEAL WITH REGIONS inferior - THAT MEANS YOU, IDIOT !: this rule makes the delegation Ambassador insulted and could lead to war.
- * NO DEMOCRACY, NO FREEDOM *, * NO MERCY, * NO WA peons, * ONLY Tyranny.: This regulation does not favor the countries in the region and prohibits the right to free speech.


Horrified by the fact that the Psychotic Dictatorship is so cruel in its regulations, and we would like to ask a few requirements:
1. Psychotic Dictatorship must change the rules that were in World Factbook Entry and the Psychotic Dictatorship asked to suspend regional activity. if these regulations adhered to the second point will not do so in the freezing area and when the third point is executed the area you will be frozen.

2. Closing the area with immediate and unconditional liberation of all prisoners in the local area Psychotic Dictatorship, as well as countries in the region will be evacuated to the Regional Europeia.

3. We will provide the opportunity for Psychotic Dictatorship leaders to change the rules with a time of 20 hari.Maka power Psychotic Dictatorship in these countries will be refunded according to the limits of the Agreement have been determined (this relates to the second point third point if violated, will be enacted the second point).

Noting that the Psychotic Dictatorship violated protocol has been involved in regional security, which has been clearly defined as illegal by the regulatory authorities of various global,

Realizing too many rules infringed World Assembly to be listed on this resolution,

Condemning the Democratic Psychotic.

Blue means a spelling, grammar or syntax correction, Red means a Rule 4 violation, and Orange means a Rule 3 violation. Honestly, this is barely comprehensible, so I'm not even going to bother analyzing based on merit.

[Bedetopia]

As one of the Lord Knights of Psychotic Dictatorships, I STRONGLY approve of this condemnation.

As DEAREST LEADER would say, we Psychotic Dictators SPIT in the face of the World Assembly and the Security Council, which are failed attempts at democracy. We SEEK this condemnation so that our evilness will be shown to the whole universe.

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But you had to ruin everything with Engrish and wrong formatting. I really want this to be voted on the SC, so let's try to fix that draft:

You can't ask for radical change in the regional government. A condemnation is "to express shock and dismay at a nation or region", so you should develop the comments on the strict rules in the WFE. There's also the fact that we started to annex the regions of those who leave the region to found their own.
You could also use a line from a previous draft condemning us, that says that nations were driven crazy and were brainwashed by regional propaganda.