Posted: Fri Apr 08, 2016 6:13 pm
I love this. Full support ahead, and inspiration for a joke proposal.
The Floor 448 ambassador gets out a cookbook.
The Floor 448 ambassador gets out a cookbook.
Because sometimes even national leaders just want to hang out
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Excidium Planetis wrote:Acquiring
3 oranges, peeled and de-veined
1 cup of milk or coconut milk
1 egg plus 2 egg yolks
1 tsp. vanilla extract
2 tbsp raw honey
1 1/2 cups of ice
Combining everything except oranges and ice in a blender and mixing for about 20 seconds to create a frothy cream, before adding the oranges and blending for another 20 seconds or until smooth. Finally, adding the ice and blending for another 20 seconds.
The Puddle Jumping Wads of Wrapper wrote:ARI: Erm. We're really not sure but those "acquiring" and "combining" clauses could be considered legislating in a repeal....
Excidium Planetis wrote:Also Disappointed by the resolution's lack of
3 oranges, peeled and de-veined
1 cup of milk or coconut milk
1 egg plus 2 egg yolks
1 tsp. vanilla extract
2 tbsp raw honey
1 1/2 cups of ice
Shocked at the target's failure to combine everything except oranges and ice in a blender and mixing for about 20 seconds to create a frothy cream, before adding the oranges and blending for another 20 seconds or until smooth; and at last adding the ice and blending for another 20 seconds.
Excidium Planetis wrote:"Any more comments before the target resolution goes to vote?"
Leppikania wrote:If this gets passed with that recipe in it, I'm voting for it as Best Resolution of 2016.
Believing that better public relations with law enforcement is conducive to a harmonious and well-ordered society, but,
Rejecting the claim that such relations have deteriorated lately, as this is not the case in most nations,
Believing that this is simply not an international issue, as nations can deal with law enforcement education without World Assembly intervention in crime and judicial procedure,
Concerned that 365 GA 'Law Enforcement Education' requires public funding to be given to law enforcement agencies even in nations that use private police forces instead of public law enforcement agencies,
Disappointed that even though this is not an issue the World Assembly should deal with, the target resolution doesn't even deal with the issue adequately, as although it requires funding to be allocated for education programs and attendance of law enforcement officers at such education programs, it fails to require that those programes actually be created,
Also disappointed by the resolution's lack of:
[list][*]three oranges, peeled and de-veined,
[*]one cup of milk or coconut milk,
[*]one egg plus 2 egg yolks,
[*]one tsp. vanilla extract,
[*]two tbsp raw honey, and
[*]one and a half cups of ice; and[/list]
Shocked at the target's failure to combine everything except oranges and ice in a blender and mixing for about twenty seconds to create a frothy cream, before adding the oranges and blending for another twenty seconds or until smooth; and at last adding the ice and blending for another twenty seconds;
Hereby repeals, 365 GA 'Law Enforcement Education'.
Imperium Anglorum wrote:I found a few errors in formatting. I corrected them. I also added some text and deleted a clause because it flows better when you give the argument and explain why that argument is true. Also, I'm part of the no-styles crowd, so all the italics and stuff got removed, mostly because I feel, along with the rest of the no-styles crowd, that it looks better this way.
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Believing that better public relations with law enforcement is conducive to a harmonious and well-ordered society, but,
Rejecting the claim that such relations have deteriorated lately, as this is not the case in most nations,
Believing that this is simply not an international issue, as nations can deal with law enforcement education without World Assembly intervention in crime and judicial procedure,
Concerned that 365 GA 'Law Enforcement Education' requires public funding to be given to law enforcement agencies even in nations that use private police forces instead of public law enforcement agencies,
Disappointed that even though this is not an issue the World Assembly should deal with, the target resolution doesn't even deal with the issue adequately, as although it requires funding to be allocated for education programs and attendance of law enforcement officers at such education programs, it fails to require that those programes actually be created,
Also disappointed by the resolution's lack of:
[list][*]three oranges, peeled and de-veined,
[*]one cup of milk or coconut milk,
[*]one egg plus 2 egg yolks,
[*]one tsp. vanilla extract,
[*]two tbsp raw honey, and
[*]one and a half cups of ice; and[/list]
Shocked at the target's failure to combine everything except oranges and ice in a blender and mixing for about twenty seconds to create a frothy cream, before adding the oranges and blending for another twenty seconds or until smooth; and at last adding the ice and blending for another twenty seconds;
Hereby repeals, 365 GA 'Law Enforcement Education'.
Excidium Planetis wrote:Imperium Anglorum wrote:I found a few errors in formatting. I corrected them. I also added some text and deleted a clause because it flows better when you give the argument and explain why that argument is true. Also, I'm part of the no-styles crowd, so all the italics and stuff got removed, mostly because I feel, along with the rest of the no-styles crowd, that it looks better this way.
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Believing that better public relations with law enforcement is conducive to a harmonious and well-ordered society, but,
Rejecting the claim that such relations have deteriorated lately, as this is not the case in most nations,
Believing that this is simply not an international issue, as nations can deal with law enforcement education without World Assembly intervention in crime and judicial procedure,
Concerned that 365 GA 'Law Enforcement Education' requires public funding to be given to law enforcement agencies even in nations that use private police forces instead of public law enforcement agencies,
Disappointed that even though this is not an issue the World Assembly should deal with, the target resolution doesn't even deal with the issue adequately, as although it requires funding to be allocated for education programs and attendance of law enforcement officers at such education programs, it fails to require that those programes actually be created,
Also disappointed by the resolution's lack of:
[list][*]three oranges, peeled and de-veined,
[*]one cup of milk or coconut milk,
[*]one egg plus 2 egg yolks,
[*]one tsp. vanilla extract,
[*]two tbsp raw honey, and
[*]one and a half cups of ice; and[/list]
Shocked at the target's failure to combine everything except oranges and ice in a blender and mixing for about twenty seconds to create a frothy cream, before adding the oranges and blending for another twenty seconds or until smooth; and at last adding the ice and blending for another twenty seconds;
Hereby repeals, 365 GA 'Law Enforcement Education'.
"It looks fairly nice. I'll see about incorporating into the current draft, which has several changes to the 'Also Disappointed' clause."
Imperium Anglorum wrote:It also does correct capitalisation errors.
Excidium Planetis wrote:Imperium Anglorum wrote:It also does correct capitalisation errors.
"I accepted the wording changes to the first preamble clause, and the 'Disappointed' clause, as well as the spacing in the list. Most other changes I rejected, because they were formatting changes that I didn't like. I also corrected a grammatical error in the first preambulatory clause, where you wrote 'public relations... is...', where 'are' should be used.
"All in all, I think this repeal is pretty solid as is."
Imperium Anglorum wrote:Excidium Planetis wrote:
"I accepted the wording changes to the first preamble clause, and the 'Disappointed' clause, as well as the spacing in the list. Most other changes I rejected, because they were formatting changes that I didn't like. I also corrected a grammatical error in the first preambulatory clause, where you wrote 'public relations... is...', where 'are' should be used.
"All in all, I think this repeal is pretty solid as is."
Your Concerned clause, § d, should end with a comma, not a full stop. Similarly, the ingredients list should have commas, the second to last one should have an and, and the last element in that section should end with a comma, not a full stop.
Excidium Planetis wrote:Imperium Anglorum wrote:Your Concerned clause, § d, should end with a comma, not a full stop. Similarly, the ingredients list should have commas, the second to last one should have an and, and the last element in that section should end with a comma, not a full stop.
"Alright, Mr. Grammar, anything else to add?"
Sciongrad wrote:"Two grammatical quibbles. Firstly, the term 'the General Assembly' must appear somewhere for the resolution to make grammatical sense. A proposal can be thought of as a single, long sentence (which you quite rightly recognize, seeing as every clause in your proposal but the last ends with a comma). However, without throwing in 'the World Assembly' or 'the General Assembly' at the very beginning or before 'hereby' in the last clause, the proposal lacks a subject.
Furthermore, in your last clause, you must put your period on the inside of a quotation mark (OOC: unless your using some alternate form of English, which is very possible. Sometimes British grammar differs from American grammar, so if that's the case, my apologies).
"Finally, I strongly advice that you remove the recipe clause. I do find it funny, but I can guarantee you that will lose you many votes. Whether or not it's included won't change my vote, but in the interest of securing this repeal's passage, I think it would be wise to remove that clause."
Excidium Planetis wrote:"The period is not part of the target resolution's title, so I don't see why I should put it in the quotations around the title."
"If the target can pass, so can this repeal. Given the level of blind support already voiced, I would say that this has a good shot."
Sciongrad wrote:Excidium Planetis wrote:"The period is not part of the target resolution's title, so I don't see why I should put it in the quotations around the title."
"Periods always go inside quotation marks, regardless of whether or not there is a period in the title."
Sciongrad wrote:"Periods always go inside quotation marks, regardless of whether or not there is a period in the title."
Araraukar wrote:Sciongrad wrote:"Periods always go inside quotation marks, regardless of whether or not there is a period in the title."
OOC: Fun fact, waaaay back in school I was taught that in Finnish grammar you're supposed to leave commas outside, when writing dialogue. Like "This is what I said", she commented. It never made any sense to me, so I've always preferred the English way for dialogue punctuation. However, including periods inside a direct quote (which is how I read using the proposal's title) when there aren't any, seems odd.
Further note: strong painkillers are distorting my reality a bit, so I'm prone to making tons of typos right now. Like when writing that sentence, I first wrote "tongs" instead of "tons".
Imperium Anglorum wrote:It's also the correct way in English. You put the full stop after the end of the quote. Thus, "This is what I said".